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Melts Away

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Isabel Galaxia
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0 posted 05-30-2001 11:06 PM       View Profile for Isabel Galaxia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Isabel Galaxia

This is very much like the song "It's Been A While" by Staind.  But it IS my original work, obviously. This is for my boyfriend, who's leaving soon,

Melts Away(It's Been A While was taken)

It's been a while
Since I could say I have no obsession
It's been a while
Since I could hold you
It's been a while
Since I could say there isn't a problem
It's been a while
Since I've consoled you
But I still live with the same problem
As harsh as it may be
And I still pray you'll be with me
Though I can't make you see
It's been a while
Since I could stand my own around your friends
It's been a while
Since they last saw me
It's been a while
Since I haven't envied other girls
It's been a while
Since they've thought of me
But you deal with my same problem
No matter what it means
All my hell
It melts away when I'm with you
And it been a while since I have thanked you

[This message has been edited by Isabel Galaxia (edited 05-31-2001).]

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stace_co2003
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1 posted 05-30-2001 11:09 PM       View Profile for stace_co2003   Email stace_co2003   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit stace_co2003's Home Page   View IP for stace_co2003

I like this..it's really cute.

STace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

CLBinLOVE
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2 posted 05-31-2001 12:10 AM       View Profile for CLBinLOVE   Email CLBinLOVE   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CLBinLOVE

"thaky you"?
for what??
isn't it my job to be there when you need me (and when you dont)?  i know i say that all the time but i still mean it, i dont mind any of that, all i care about is if you're happy or not.  
good poem but i kinda got lost when u said "since they last me" but maybe im just tired.  i love you

i am blinded by the silence of a breaking heart... i cant see myself

cherish
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3 posted 05-31-2001 01:45 AM       View Profile for cherish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherish

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww...sweet sweet sweet!!....i enjoyed this very much thank you.. ...sad that hes leaving...but this poem is great




"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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4 posted 05-31-2001 02:05 AM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

sweet and nice...great job...i enjoyed it  ...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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5 posted 05-31-2001 02:47 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Well done here. Quite sweet!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 05-31-2001 09:38 AM       View Profile for ethel lahootie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ethel lahootie

bel--GOOD JOB i liked this...although...you shouldnt TRY to take other ppls work jk! if u needa talk or do somethin this summer call me aighty!
have fun (and craig better get u something while hes gone!!
~jObEtHeL~  
Isabel Galaxia
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7 posted 05-31-2001 11:38 PM       View Profile for Isabel Galaxia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Isabel Galaxia

Stace- thanks!
Craig- I fixed it so you'd understand.  What do I thank you for?  I thank you for everything, for the past (almost) year and a half, for the past two years, for being here, for putting up with me, for loving me.  And now you're gone, or will be soon, I'll miss you.     Just come home...
A.A.?- Thank you(!)
Cherish- Hehe, will leave 4:45 tomorrow morning.
Dopey- lol, Gracias
Ethel- Don't worry, I told him to get me something, plus a postcard.    Mr.I-get-to-go-to-Costa-Rica-and-leave-my-girlfriend-at-home!!    Miss Mr.M yet? (HAHA!)  
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with you


8 posted 06-02-2001 04:33 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

this is great!   ~SEA
fearing-laughter
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9 posted 06-03-2001 04:39 AM       View Profile for fearing-laughter   Email fearing-laughter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fearing-laughter

kool.  staind would be proud.  i liked this poem..by the way do you like their song "Epiphany"??just curious. :-D byyye.
-fear-
AngelPoet87
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~*~the cutest~*~


11 posted 06-03-2001 11:41 AM       View Profile for thedarkangel   Email thedarkangel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for thedarkangel

it's so sweet. bless.... i just wanna write somethin like that for my bf now to show how much he means 2 me   incredibly well written and a great way 2 show your feelings
WELL DONE and BLESS!!!!
love, peace and eyeliner
angel
~x~

tattoos of memories and dead skin on trial for what it's worth it was worth all the while - Green Day

Isabel Galaxia
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12 posted 06-04-2001 09:12 PM       View Profile for Isabel Galaxia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Isabel Galaxia

Sea and AngelPoet- thanks!
Fear- Thank you.  I've only heard part of it, but yes I like it.
Angel- Look! I've almost kinda inspired someone!! lol
Thanks again,
Bel
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I LOVE THE SONG "its Been A While" By Staind!!!! AAhhhh amazing song hehehe   LIked the poem lots and lots   SMILE AND BE HAPPY!!! HEHEHE
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14 posted 06-07-2001 10:20 PM       View Profile for DarkAngelOfTheStars   Email DarkAngelOfTheStars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DarkAngelOfTheStars

great poem.....i love staind!!

Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

anonymousfemale
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15 posted 09-08-2001 04:12 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

I like this but not as much as your others. It doesn't pack the same punch. All the same, it's still a nice thank you to someone in your life.

Well done.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

 
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