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Isabel Galaxia
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0 posted 2001-05-30 11:06 PM


This is very much like the song "It's Been A While" by Staind.  But it IS my original work, obviously. This is for my boyfriend, who's leaving soon,

Melts Away(It's Been A While was taken)

It's been a while
Since I could say I have no obsession
It's been a while
Since I could hold you
It's been a while
Since I could say there isn't a problem
It's been a while
Since I've consoled you
But I still live with the same problem
As harsh as it may be
And I still pray you'll be with me
Though I can't make you see
It's been a while
Since I could stand my own around your friends
It's been a while
Since they last saw me
It's been a while
Since I haven't envied other girls
It's been a while
Since they've thought of me
But you deal with my same problem
No matter what it means
All my hell
It melts away when I'm with you
And it been a while since I have thanked you

[This message has been edited by Isabel Galaxia (edited 05-31-2001).]

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stace_co2003
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1 posted 2001-05-30 11:09 PM


I like this..it's really cute.

STace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

CLBinLOVE
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2 posted 2001-05-31 12:10 PM


"thaky you"?
for what??
isn't it my job to be there when you need me (and when you dont)?  i know i say that all the time but i still mean it, i dont mind any of that, all i care about is if you're happy or not.  
good poem but i kinda got lost when u said "since they last me" but maybe im just tired.  i love you

i am blinded by the silence of a breaking heart... i cant see myself

cherish
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3 posted 2001-05-31 01:45 AM


awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww...sweet sweet sweet!!....i enjoyed this very much thank you.. ...sad that hes leaving...but this poem is great




"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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4 posted 2001-05-31 02:05 AM


sweet and nice...great job...i enjoyed it  ...bye

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-31-2001).]

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5 posted 2001-05-31 02:47 AM


Well done here. Quite sweet!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

ethel lahootie
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6 posted 2001-05-31 09:38 AM


bel--GOOD JOB i liked this...although...you shouldnt TRY to take other ppls work jk! if u needa talk or do somethin this summer call me aighty!
have fun (and craig better get u something while hes gone!!
~jObEtHeL~  

Isabel Galaxia
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7 posted 2001-05-31 11:38 PM


Stace- thanks!
Craig- I fixed it so you'd understand.  What do I thank you for?  I thank you for everything, for the past (almost) year and a half, for the past two years, for being here, for putting up with me, for loving me.  And now you're gone, or will be soon, I'll miss you.     Just come home...
A.A.?- Thank you(!)
Cherish- Hehe, will leave 4:45 tomorrow morning.
Dopey- lol, Gracias
Ethel- Don't worry, I told him to get me something, plus a postcard.    Mr.I-get-to-go-to-Costa-Rica-and-leave-my-girlfriend-at-home!!    Miss Mr.M yet? (HAHA!)  

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with you
8 posted 2001-06-02 04:33 AM


this is great!   ~SEA
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9 posted 2001-06-03 04:39 AM


kool.  staind would be proud.  i liked this poem..by the way do you like their song "Epiphany"??just curious. :-D byyye.
-fear-

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thedarkangel
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11 posted 2001-06-03 11:41 AM


it's so sweet. bless.... i just wanna write somethin like that for my bf now to show how much he means 2 me   incredibly well written and a great way 2 show your feelings
WELL DONE and BLESS!!!!
love, peace and eyeliner
angel
~x~

tattoos of memories and dead skin on trial for what it's worth it was worth all the while - Green Day

Isabel Galaxia
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12 posted 2001-06-04 09:12 PM


Sea and AngelPoet- thanks!
Fear- Thank you.  I've only heard part of it, but yes I like it.
Angel- Look! I've almost kinda inspired someone!! lol
Thanks again,
Bel

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13 posted 2001-06-06 09:47 PM


I LOVE THE SONG "its Been A While" By Staind!!!! AAhhhh amazing song hehehe   LIked the poem lots and lots   SMILE AND BE HAPPY!!! HEHEHE
DarkAngelOfTheStars
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14 posted 2001-06-07 10:20 PM


great poem.....i love staind!!

Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

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15 posted 2001-09-08 04:12 AM


I like this but not as much as your others. It doesn't pack the same punch. All the same, it's still a nice thank you to someone in your life.

Well done.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

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