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n e where
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0 posted 2001-05-30 07:43 PM




The only thing
I hate about her
Is her long chain lead behind her
As she ties me to it and leads me on

Sometimes she may let me off
and I try to forget to love her
But then I am all tied up again
And led on...and on

Why? I don't deserve this
She is so beautiful
I can see her aura from a distance away
Shining like a bright star
As I fall from the depths
Deeper into her dark eyes
Dark and dangerous
I should stay away

But it's all too hard
The only thing that I hate
Is her dog lead
That she carries with her
So ready
To pull along my heart.

~I'd rather see the world from another angle~

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1 posted 2001-05-30 07:51 PM


very difficult sitaution...hope things get better and you wrote it well...i liked it

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Meggie1986
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2 posted 2001-05-30 10:32 PM


I'm sorry.  That's tough.  I hope you can get over her, or things work out.  Wonderful expresion of your feelings.  This was a fantastic poem!

*One meets his destiny often in the road he takes to avoid it.

stace_co2003
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3 posted 2001-05-30 11:11 PM


I like this, and I like how you put so much emotion behind every line.
thanks for sharing!

Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

Zengo
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4 posted 2001-05-30 11:36 PM


Good poem..I know how you feel I'm a sucker too!! I can never have the ones I want..

Nick

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5 posted 2001-05-31 01:59 AM


Well done. i really liked this one. You portrayed being a leash very well. I have been like this with a woman. It's the most horrible thing. Hope all gets better!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-05-31 02:06 AM


wow...very cool write.....I like this very much    SEA
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7 posted 2001-05-31 02:27 AM


wow wow wow..ok..im a fan!!..agpfagp??..YES!!!!....
i love this LOVE it y'hear?...this is great...more says i MORE!!!!!!

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8 posted 2001-05-31 09:42 PM


WOW
very....interesting...wait that word doesnt even describe it...when i get a word ill tell ya!
±Ålyssa±

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9 posted 2001-06-01 12:33 PM


Nice... don't be afraid to urinate on the shoes or bite the leash a bit.  
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