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stace_co2003
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In a dream world

0 posted 2001-05-29 07:51 PM


Look at the bird in the sky.
It flies so high-
It flies so free...
Sometimes I wish that it was me.

Over the trees,
Flying so free...
for a moment--escaping reality...
and having my own mentality.

Look at the fish swimming in the sea..
it too appears to be free.
Swimming around to it’s delight,
yet it seems to wish for flight.

The birds above
Have all my love.
They are beautiful creatures
with wonderful features.

They glide about the works of man,
though our ways-they do not understand.
But yet the are so free,
And the freedom is what catches me.

To be up in the sky so high,
If I had that freedom, I would fly-
fly up to the top of the clouds,
without looking back or having a doubt.

Yet I would be lonely without a friend
To share this experience with until the end.
And for this I’d pick Andrew!
Why? because he is the one and only Zu!!

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LOL, I couldn't think of an ending...and I figured Zu wouldn't mind, cuz after all, he loves the attention.  


I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

[This message has been edited by stace_co2003 (edited 05-29-2001).]

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SEA
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1 posted 2001-05-29 10:38 PM


this is cute....and I like the ending    SEA
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2 posted 2001-05-29 10:51 PM


Dont well all wish we could be that bird so free. Good job   XX00

"should I smile because we are friends or cry because thats all will ever be?".

*sigh* Im bored....Im all alone...ummmmmm...anyone got msn??? XFall

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3 posted 2001-05-29 10:53 PM


haha...the ending was cute ...and this poem overall pictured a peaceful picture and grea use of imagery...thanks for sharing it

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4 posted 2001-05-30 12:16 PM


I hate to repeat but yea the ending was cute. I enjoyed this.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-05-30 12:32 PM


Lol Lovely ending hun    GReat poem i liked it heaps keep smiling :P

Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes.

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swimming in fairy floss...........
6 posted 2001-05-30 12:55 PM


awwwwww...sweet ending... ...where's andrew anyways???...hehehe...i wish i were an ant!!...so little yet so important!!...keep posting stace..
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7 posted 2001-05-30 02:27 PM


Hey this should be at the top just because it has my name in it... but really all this has got to end... why? because I think my head might explode... Great poem Stace... very cute ending  
The one and only Zu.

the_rescue
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8 posted 2001-05-30 02:59 PM


that was really cool.  Way to go Zu
stace_co2003
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9 posted 2001-05-30 04:05 PM


thanks for all of the replies..
and no Zu, I won't stop!! I refuse!!  

Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

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10 posted 2001-06-02 05:37 PM


hmmmm......Am I missing something here  
good job Stace

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11 posted 2001-06-02 05:40 PM


Great Job and Keep up the awsome work!
  Lauren

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12 posted 2001-06-02 06:47 PM


Ok back to the top just because my name is in it
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13 posted 2001-06-02 06:52 PM


Good job on this one i liked it  
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14 posted 2001-06-02 07:00 PM


Is it me, or does this kinda seem like a song?  Anyway, i thought it was beauty.  I applaud you.

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