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Godsend_1
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0 posted 05-29-2001 05:35 PM       View Profile for Godsend_1   Email Godsend_1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Godsend_1

i weep from the pain
of dismembered hearts
i watch as you take it
and rip me apart

you say your just kidding
and its only in jest
well the pain i feel real
and so is the blood i bleed

and yet you see my blood
and you laugh or simply ignore
and i weep from the pain
of my dismembered heart

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be..so deal with it
if i am nothing else i am ME

© Copyright 2001 Ben Redshaw - All Rights Reserved
stace_co2003
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1 posted 05-29-2001 05:44 PM       View Profile for stace_co2003   Email stace_co2003   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit stace_co2003's Home Page   View IP for stace_co2003

wow, I'm sorry, I hope things get better for you. keep your chin up and just keep smiling
*s*
Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

AngelPoet87
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you're the best writer ben i just wish you had something happier to write about hun.
Angel Bee
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3 posted 05-29-2001 08:52 PM       View Profile for Angel Bee   Email Angel Bee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Angel Bee

this was good, very heart felt i think, keep writing, -ab

*~"Sometimes I wish I was a little girl again--because bruised knees heal faster than broken hearts."~*

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4 posted 05-29-2001 10:33 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

this goes right to the heart of it....I liked this    SEA
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5 posted 05-29-2001 10:46 PM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

sad...you said it well...graet job and hope things are better

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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6 posted 05-30-2001 12:08 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Well done. I really liked this one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs


7 posted 06-03-2001 12:54 AM       View Profile for xShUgArHiGhx   Email xShUgArHiGhx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit xShUgArHiGhx's Home Page   View IP for xShUgArHiGhx

know how you feel and its awful...::hugs::
never_a_princess
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8 posted 06-12-2001 10:31 PM       View Profile for never_a_princess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for never_a_princess

i like the theme "i weep from the pain" and how you used it near the beginning and the end. *likes this one* not as good as others, but still really goodish! *hugz*
~Anna *waves*
the_rescue
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9 posted 06-13-2001 09:05 AM       View Profile for the_rescue   Email the_rescue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_rescue

nice write man I hope it gets better you know

Rescue

ps if you need to talk to anyone I am here but then again I might not be technically here anyways you know what I mean

in the silence of the night I hear angels voices singing your name oh how beautiful is your name as they sing over and over.  (SPOKEN)

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10 posted 06-16-2001 02:46 PM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

I like this one, Ben.  I'm sorry that you feel this way... *hugs*  Email me sometime if you ever need to talk.  I enjoyed this poem.  I hope you feel better.

--Marie

"You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced.
Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection.  Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." --Pulp

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11 posted 02-18-2002 05:17 PM       View Profile for takemeawaytoday   Email takemeawaytoday   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for takemeawaytoday

great poem hope to hear more from you about it
 
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