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Teen Poetry #4

A Shining World

zarina
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since 2001-05-19

Posts 180

0 posted 2001-05-29 03:11 PM

-this is a very short poem. Could maybe be a beginning of a longer, I dont know. Not my best, I don't even like it at all..but I'll post it.-

Im in a shining world
were everything is pink
Im so high upstairs
..When will I fall down?

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-29 03:25 PM

i liked where you were getting at...but definitly i think you should finish this...hope tos ee how it turns out

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-05-29 10:58 PM

Hopefully you won't

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-06-01 06:21 PM

interesting choice of words to describe you situation. good job and keep sharing

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

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