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The Wood_Stock Colelction : Lesser Man
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The Wood_Stock Colelction : Lesser Man |
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Wood_Stock Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 58The little yellow |
- Lesser Man - A lesser man I couldn't find, The lesser man would leave it all behind. Whilst I'm a lesser man than you, I'm strong enough to embrace the truth. Lost this battle, I'll win the war, Forgotten what I'm fighting for. The world so clean, has been stained with blood, The truth now tainted, clear as mud. Weak of heart, strong of mind, I once could see, now I'm blind. The lesser man would have given up, Maybe I'm a strong man, who is out of luck. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great job...the flow was very nice  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job on this one. i really liked this just like your other poems.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Tears_of_a_Phoenix New Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 4Ballarat, Vic |
Yo Noz, yet another stroke of genius!  Man what's with the influx of woodstock collection?? Seem's Albert's a big fan!! what's with the stupid little padlocks?? Anyway about the friendship thing, now you have me worried, i swear that whatever you read into those poems about our friendship is all in your head, i merely meant them in a metophorical sense! Anyway i think we need to talk. "Wise men don't play leap-frog with a unicorn" |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Good job on this. It's well written. By the way, Tears_of_a_Phoenix, the padlocks mean that the thread is closed for a while. In a little while the padlocks will be gone. ~AF~ Know what you want. Become your real self. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I like this... the thoughts are very interesting. Particularily, how you rhymed caught my eye. Rhymes with a vowel tense, as in the last stanza. When done correctly the reader doesn't even notice that this is being done. I didn't notice. Good job.I hope to read more of your work in the future. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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