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Angel of the watch. (paradelle)
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Angel of the watch. (paradelle) |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Angel of the watch. Beauty like an angel, Beauty like an angel, Floating in a cloud, Floating in a cloud, Floating like an angel, Beauty in a cloud, Glory in stormy seasons, Glory in stormy seasons, Watch the passing days, Watch the passing days, Watch the stormy days, Seasons passing in glory, Wonder in her eye, Wonder in her eye, Silence of the winds, Silence of the winds, Wonder in the silence, Winds, of her eye, Stormy days in wonder, Angel of the watch, Beauty in her silence, Floating like the winds, Glory a passing cloud, Seasons like an eye. --- I'd like to thank everyone who has been replying to my old stuff It was a suprise to see some of my old stuff. Thanks Stacy  Zu Has anyone seen my cabbage? |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
you are, of course, very welcome anytime  but I really liked this one Zu. I've said it before, and I still think it now..you get better and better everytime I read something of yours. keep it up, and I hope to hear from you very soon.  *s* Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
This is great Zu. I like the stormy sort of feeling it gives. Keep it up, -Kosetsu "Eat, drink, and be merry, for tomorrow we die." - Shakespeare |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
oh!! I get it!! this was written....about ME!!!!  heehee, yeah, I'd like to be that full of myself. I just fogot to add it to my library, and figured that since I have to reply again to do that, I'd just make an idiot out of myself. well, mission accomplished, it's time to go away. *s* Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow!...i absolutly loved this poem...the way it was written, the format and the flow everything was nice...great job and hope to see more marsha!  ...?i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
great poem...you're getting real good at this format!!!..woooo hooo..cant wait to read more!!!...nooooooooooo stace..it was about me!!!..  ..<----- see? |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done Zu! I liked this one a lot! Not as good as some of your other work, but nonetheless a wonderful read.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Ok so I guess your all wondering who it's about then... The Angel of the watch of course... anyway thanks for the replies Zu |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
I'm sorry but you are wrong!! it's about me, cuz I'm an angel, and I've got the halo to prove it!!! I'm special!!  I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
great job zu. this reply would be longer, but i'm in the process of eating candy and the chocolate's melting on my fingers and i'm typing with one hand. I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
lol pass the chocolate this way hun  dude! i take a lil vacation and i get back and we have new kick ace smilies!!!! woo hoo this is great. newayz.....Zu great job on this. u did this wonderfully. <~~~~~~~~ that is SOOOOOOO cutish lolstiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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dramaqueen22086 Member
since 2001-05-05
Posts 50Hadlyme, CT |
i'm not sure i've every read anything of your, im new here, but i think i will from now on, you are really good, and i liked this poem alot ~!kellie!~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I really like this paradelle, Zu. I think the first stanza was, however, sloppily done. It was simply a reversal of two words, I crinkled my nose at that. The rest of it, though, was incredibly redeeming. Everything you've done here in rearranging the words works so well, there's not a hint of imperfection in the actual meaning of each line. You did a marvelous job of penning a paradelle that actually makes sense in each line, which is very tough to do. It's ones like this that made me fascinated with the format in the first place. Thanks for the marvelous read. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Oh and I agree, it is about Stacey. Sorry, but it's the truth and you are wrong wrong wrong!! |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
thank you allan!!! I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Allan, how much did she pay you? Zu, two words: You're amazing!! Enough said. ~AF~ Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved." |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Ok so who is paying you all to say this... and more to the point why are they doing this? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Awesome, Zu! *applauds* Very well done! Thanks for sharing... I am impressed. --Marie "You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced. |
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