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thoughts on a cliche

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kaile
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0 posted 05-28-2001 01:30 PM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for kaile

Nay,

the grass may not be greenier

on the other side

but the sky is definitely bluer

and the widened eyes turn resolutely unblinking

All the better to absorb bliss with
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1 posted 05-28-2001 01:44 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Child of the Stars

  Cool! Really creative look on what we see as cliches. I liked this a lot.  
  ~Carly

"Go outside and use your own eyes. You'll be surprised to see things you've never been taught..."
   ~Edouard Manet

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2 posted 05-28-2001 01:54 PM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

very creative...great imagery useage with meaning...i liekd it...thanks for sharing it and keep writing ...?

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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3 posted 05-28-2001 02:54 PM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Very nicely done here....I really thought you did well on this one. Looking forward to more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 05-28-2001 03:09 PM       View Profile for stace_co2003   Email stace_co2003   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit stace_co2003's Home Page   View IP for stace_co2003

great poem....

it was really great, and I hope to hear more!! or read more, whatever!!  


*s*
Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

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5 posted 05-28-2001 07:15 PM       View Profile for obscurity of cloud   Email obscurity of cloud   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for obscurity of cloud

I like this a lot!  I always say that in poetry, you've got to avoid cliche like the plague....  

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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6 posted 05-29-2001 01:05 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

thank you....while i was travelling, i was constantly amazed at how beautiful the skies were and how i never actually bothered to appreciate the skies back home...

that led to this musing and yup, i strive to admire the clouds always

ahh, the simple things in life...
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7 posted 05-30-2001 06:10 AM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Very nice. The clouds give the best inspiration for poems. Indeed, the simple things in life.  

Well done.

~AF~

Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved."
-Van Kaam

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8 posted 06-01-2001 06:08 AM       View Profile for Yu Lan   Email Yu Lan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Yu Lan

I'm laughing now.. this is so.. neat! ^_^ Enjoyed muchly Kai Le.. thanx for putting this link in the Poetry Haven..

“One word can be magical. Imagine then, the effect of several words, together..”

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9 posted 06-01-2001 07:07 AM       View Profile for branden726   Email branden726   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for branden726

Well i must say this is a first ive ever read in passions :-/ well hey keep up the good work its a really good poem

*Tears of love*
*Tears of faith*
*Never any Tears of hate*

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10 posted 06-03-2001 12:06 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

thank you for your comments...
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now this....is good    
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12 posted 06-04-2001 05:51 PM       View Profile for Meggie1986   Email Meggie1986   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meggie1986's Home Page   View IP for Meggie1986

Very nice outlook  .  This is great

*One meets his destiny often in the road he takes to avoid it.

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13 posted 06-05-2001 06:40 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

SEA and Meggie, i am glad you enjoyed this musing...   because i always strive to look at things from an unique outlook...

[This message has been edited by faterider (edited 06-05-2001).]

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14 posted 11-17-2001 11:46 AM       View Profile for Mon Cherie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mon Cherie

Yes, I realised that too.
The grass might not be greener, but the skies are bluer!!  
Always so clear and cloudless here, that's the only thing I don't miss about home.  
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15 posted 03-17-2003 12:23 PM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

hmmm, thinking of submitting this for Reflections
 
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