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chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

0 posted 2001-05-27 09:10 PM

I lied again...

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Take a hand
Stretch across the burning sky
Feel His breath, His life
And watch a bloody sunrise.

I cry out
Watching myself turn right around
Blinded by the sin
That pushed me to unholy ground.

My knees
Buckle from under me
I'm drowning in the ocean
Of my dreams.

I kiss Your hand
With lips that curse Your name.
I never knew what life could be
Until You came
It's not the same
For me.

I step away
Keeping myself from seeing
Anger, hate, and greed
Are drugs that keep me from believing.

Lame am I
My knees
Buckles from under me
I'm drowning in the ocean
Of my dreams...

[This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 05-27-2001).]

stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

1 posted 2001-05-27 09:21 PM

wow, this is really....great...keep writing!!! for me?!?!? lol, sorry, I'm in a very...odd mood, but really, do keep writing. I enjoy reading what you have to say.
*s*
Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

2 posted 2001-05-27 09:48 PM

merci beaucoup.
Gracias.
Thank you.
Arigato.
Je je (or sheh sheh if you're mandrin...I no speak mandrin though)

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-05-27 09:49 PM

^huh!...how many lang's was that?

...but on the poem..ok?...i related to this poem...it hit me hard!...great job...i really liked this poem...hope to see more...and youre back soon...lol! ms...liah!!...anyways...keep writing

...?

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-27-2001).]

fozzyozzy
Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

4 posted 2001-05-27 10:00 PM

Good job Chasin'. I enjoyed it mucho. Es ist Prima!

fOZZYOZZY

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
Robert Fr

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

5 posted 2001-05-27 10:05 PM

Gracias mis amigos. MUCHO gracias.

"Canto, bailo, miras mí!!!"

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-05-28 01:07 AM

Not your best but very nicely done. I liked this one leah.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

7 posted 2001-05-28 03:09 AM

I knew the mandarin one!! Booya!

Ahem...Your piece had some wonderful imagery in it. In particular
"Feel His breath, His life
And watch a bloody sunrise."

That was great.

Well done.

~AF~

Know what you want. Become your real self.
~ David Harold Fink ~

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