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fozzyozzy
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0 posted 2001-05-24 10:19 PM


Star Child

Child of stars like Gemini but one
Glittering skys and a trust be gone
Subject to Odysseus' will be done

Out amongst the hazy twirling song
Could it be souless lost but still found
Map of the universe not yet drawn

Now you too lost on this earth so round
Skys of black and oblivion trap
Neither safe in void nor on the ground

All of this fall and oak tree's sap
Star child fly with your mindes own map.

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
Robert Fr

© Copyright 2001 Sean Michael DeFlora - All Rights Reserved
cherish
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since 2001-03-25
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swimming in fairy floss...........
1 posted 2001-05-24 10:23 PM


Star child fly with your mindes own map.
wow...i love the imagery in this poem...you wrote it so well.. ...thank you much for the read!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

pharon
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alabama
2 posted 2001-05-24 10:23 PM


dang...i love this one...a couple words misspelled here and there..but it might be intetional so i don't know...overall my response would be...wow

      me

anonymous albert ?
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3 posted 2001-05-25 01:20 AM


great imagery and words were quite written well...i enjoyed this  alot and keep writing... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

anonymousfemale
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Limbo
4 posted 2001-05-25 03:41 AM


WOW!

This is fantastic! Definitely one of your better pieces. The descriptions were so wonderful that they just give you the feeling of wanting to read it over and over again.

Thanks for such a great read.  

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

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5 posted 2001-05-25 04:37 AM


Well done here. Not your best, but still a wonderful post....

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

zarina
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since 2001-05-19
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6 posted 2001-05-25 06:26 AM


Nice poem! I loved it  
Poet on Acid
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7 posted 2001-05-30 04:00 AM


Wow dude. That was amazing.

"It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ<

knightlyshadows
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obscured vision
8 posted 2001-05-30 04:19 AM


ooo i liked this! imagery was great. and it was well written! goin to my library!
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

Just leave me alone and give me some space.

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