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Terryloveiris_85
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 61
The middle of nowhere

0 posted 2001-05-24 07:55 PM

winter wind rustling
it can blow leaves away
in the crystal pool.

love is so blind
when it's even in your heart
it can make you cry.

i'd give eternity to be by your side-goo goo dolls/City of Angels soundtrack

goodness is found in the heart, not the money.

[This message has been edited by Terryloveiris_85 (edited 05-24-2001).]

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-24 07:57 PM

beautiful haikuys...i enjoyed each one a lot...thanks for sharing it and hope to see more...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Terryloveiris_85
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 61
The middle of nowhere

2 posted 2001-05-24 08:01 PM

albert, u like replying don't u?i appreciate it alot thanxs
~IRIS

i'd give eternity to be by your side-goo goo dolls/City of Angels soundtrack

goodness is found in the heart, not the money.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-05-25 03:46 AM

These were great, but I believe the second one would be classified as a senryu due to the lack of it being about nature and the like....still with the 5-7-5 syllable count.
Well done tho.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-05-26 02:47 AM

yea...?...sooo...now!...go and reply to one of my poems

...hehe...just kidding

...but...thanks to you for acknowledging my replys also

ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!!

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

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5 posted 2001-05-26 02:49 AM

oops!

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Erin
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since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

6 posted 2001-05-26 05:07 AM

I like them both alot. But this one isnt a haiku its a senyru. A hakiu has things to do with nature (from what I can remember) and a senyru is the same thing except it has to do with anything Im pretty sure. But you did a great job. I had fun doing these. Keep it up!!!

love is so blind
when it's even in your heart
it can make you cry.

"If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend."

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

7 posted 2001-05-26 06:57 AM

nice job...i liked your first offering a lot

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