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the_rescue
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0 posted 2001-05-23 01:47 PM


The morning breaks the sun rises
I awake to this days many suprises
A hope of a new day and new pleasures
a hope of finding some new treasures

Strech out let my feet touch the floor
I had 8 hours of sleep but still need more
I wake I dress and I'm out the door
It's all good I've done it all before

Repetition in my mind I do it all the time
with out a noice like the voiceless mime
quitely I shut the door man I forgot my hat
something I must have you know that

I run across the yard the dew on my feet
wish I had time to smell the air so sweet
I fumble with the keys as the door unlocks
fly around the corner just a few more blocks

I'm speeding cause once again I'm running late
A cop pulls me over just another twist of fate
He writes the ticket and here I wait
traffic violations I'm starting to hate

But as I sit, I finally stop to see the morning
It's now joy for that ticket instead of mourning
A fast paced life, now time to slow down
we often forget it's joys, the reason for our frown.

I start driving once again ticket in my hand
the meaning of life I start to understand
it's not about the money, it's not about the glory
so what if we're not remembered, we have no story

It's all about getting close to the ones you love
those that are here on earth & the true God up above
about sharing, caring, about laying your life down
to help remove your fellow mans frown




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punkrockerrobin
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1 posted 2001-05-23 01:53 PM


wow babe you're awesome at writting! i got another poem for ya hun but i won't post it till later. love ya!
robin

I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL!

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2 posted 2001-05-23 01:54 PM


ok this one hit home with me. not takin the time to appreciate the things around me and such. the last stanza i just loved....the last line was fantastic!i think you did a great job on this and i like the rhyme of morning and mourning. great job and cant wait to c mores. *hugs* to the library it gos

darn you robin! stealin it agains grrrrrrr *smax yas* dork i had it first :P
tiff


“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I want to look into your eyes and see you smile at me
I want to hear you say "Well done"

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-23-2001).]

HeAvEnS AnGeL
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3 posted 2001-05-23 03:48 PM


Beautiful
*mwah!*

lonely*soul
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4 posted 2001-05-23 04:35 PM


wow ive read two of ur poems now and im really looking foward to seeing alot more of your work, you seem like that optimistic kinda person that always writes good poetry..hope to see more!

          *KiMMiE*

lonely*soul
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east haddam (moodus) ct :)
5 posted 2001-05-23 04:36 PM


hit the button!  
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6 posted 2001-05-23 05:01 PM


beauitful poem...written so well...hope to see more soon... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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7 posted 2001-05-23 06:38 PM


It seems that people know you......can somebody explain the connection between the all of you?  

ANyway, well done on the message. Very well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

punkrockerrobin
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8 posted 2001-05-23 07:40 PM


awwwww javi you feel left out? well i know only the_resue and kinightlyshadows and you lol!
robin

the_rescue
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9 posted 2001-05-23 07:45 PM


I know poeticgirl and then knightlyshadows (just met today) the rest apparently just like my stuff YEAH Lol no, I will not get a big head lol.

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10 posted 2001-05-23 07:50 PM


This is great...it really shows the multifacetedness (word?) of your work.  keep it up!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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11 posted 2001-05-24 03:48 PM


uh huh suuuuuuuuuure jimmy! lol! you're a great writer hun keep it up! love ya!
robin

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12 posted 2001-05-24 06:50 PM


this was soooooooooooo good!!!!  i love it!!!     don't worry about speeding tickets, you aren't the only one  


Valerie

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the_rescue
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13 posted 2001-05-31 08:51 AM


no speeding tickets please lol
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