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TearsOfPearls
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0 posted 2001-05-23 01:46 PM


Moments of time
slip through my hand,
all I can do
is watch it fall and
smash to pieces
as it hits the floor
and scatter to all corners
of this life I adore.

I'm not allright
and I'm not fine,
these moments of time
are no longer mine,
and sooner or later
it will take it's toll,
I don't know how
but I've lost control.

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

© Copyright 2001 TearsOfPearls - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-23 05:11 PM


great poem...the flow was reaaly nice...i enjoyed this poem a lot...and keepw riting also thnaks for sharing it... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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2 posted 2001-05-23 05:48 PM


Well done, I liked this one a lot!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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with you
3 posted 2001-05-23 09:37 PM


I hope this is "just poetry" and that you are ok..... if you need to talk, just email me ok?    SEA
lonely*soul
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4 posted 2001-05-23 09:41 PM


this is really good, i like, and it flows well too!
          *KiMMiE*

Smlie4u87
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5 posted 2001-05-23 09:56 PM


Hey, Your poem is really really good. I really like it alot.

Always,
   Tracy

knightlyshadows
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6 posted 2001-05-23 09:58 PM


i so know wut u mean. this is in my library.
great job.
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I want to look into your eyes and see you smile at me
I want to hear you say "Well done"

fozzyozzy
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7 posted 2001-05-23 10:18 PM


Great poem.  This is one of my faves.  Zip straight to mine library.

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
Robert Fr

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8 posted 2001-05-23 11:30 PM


this WAS great! flowed really good..very simple but had lots of meaning behind it. wonderful  

*dq

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

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9 posted 2001-05-24 08:01 AM


This flowed really nicely and it expressed the feeling of being totally out of control which i can totally relate to since i feel like that every second of my life. GREAT poem  
EagleScorpion
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10 posted 2001-07-03 03:32 PM


mmm
I have a horrible memory..
and I have trouble remembering things...
All those stories that my dad told me,
They are just whispers in time..
All those things that never came to be,
They are just whispers in time..
All those places I wanted to go,
They are just whispers in time..
AND ALL THOSE FRIENDS WHO NOW I DO NOT KNOW
They are all just whispers in time..
Cuz we.. are messengers of memory...
Just whispers in time...

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