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the_rescue
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0 posted 2001-05-23 12:46 PM


What's wrong with the pick up line
I mean so what if I think your fine
would you rather me act like an idiot
in a way that you would rather forget

So what if I ask if your feet hurt
did you fall from heaven land in the dirt
I lost my way home can I go with you
I'm Looking place to stay what do you want me to do
I mean would you rather have me freeze in the cold
when I could have you in my arms to hold

Oh wait that's cheesy right just another line
I mean what if I truely wanted you to be mine
So what if I lost the number for my phone
maybe after a while I can call yours my own
Is this just to hard of a thing to ask
Is this ceasing of nagging an impossible task
Oh well I guess I'll keep my lines to my self
Maybe right a book and put them on a shelf.

I mean right guys we try to make the girl smile
and they tell us to take a hike walk another mile
unappreciative I tell you nothing more nothing less
this whole pick up line thing has caused us a mess
Hey I guess they never know what they will miss
because as the Ole Hammer said you can't touch this.

Hmmm quote for me is as follows:
Stupid CUPID stop pickin on me lol

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1 posted 2001-05-23 12:50 PM


babe that was cute! hehe you know you can come home with me lol! well anyways hun welcome to passions! i hope this isn't the only poem you write.
robin

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2 posted 2001-05-23 12:54 PM


I'm guessing this was a rebuttle for the girl who wrote the other one...LOL
I think there is nothing wrong with pick-up lines, as long as you're using them with humour and good taste. You know? Some guys are just plain cheesy, and really believe girls will buy all of that nonsense. hehe
Nice rebuttle, and welcome to passions!!

Jenn

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Welcome!   I've always enjoyed a good pick up line...creative guys who add fun to it always got my time.... I hope you post more too....and please check your email for a special greeting!    SEA
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4 posted 2001-05-23 01:16 PM


Hehe, I liked this poem, well written, and hope to read alot more of your work.

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

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5 posted 2001-05-23 01:19 PM


lol hmmmmmmm i wonder if this is who i think it is.. yup i think it is lols i wont tells thos if tis u btw! *hugs* i like this muchs and this just lets me know that u r a good writer and makes me want to c more of ur stuffish soooooo i think ill bugs ya till ya lets me:P lols jk great job!
tiff

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I want to look into your eyes and see you smile at me
I want to hear you say "Well done"

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6 posted 2001-05-23 01:50 PM


thanx for the encouragement us guys need some support to.  But yeah pic up lines can be fun for the most part. Mostly if they make a girl laugh
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7 posted 2001-05-23 01:55 PM


ok seriously who do you think I am? lol
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8 posted 2001-05-23 01:56 PM


tiff you leave jimmy alone! hes mine lol! you have ben!
robin

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9 posted 2001-05-23 02:04 PM


darn it! its not him   jimmy u dodo grrrs@u
lol :P but i likes ur stuffs newayz *hugs*
tiff <~~~ mine not urs robin u dork

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I want to hear you say "Well done"

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10 posted 2001-05-23 02:49 PM


IT'S A CONSPIRACY!!!
Oh yeah...great poem and welcome to passions.....

"I'll take in anyone who's taking off their camouflage..." ~Third Eye Blind~Camouflage

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11 posted 2001-05-23 03:35 PM


LOL I loved this poem!!
I don't think all pick up lines are cheesy
but some guys just play them out to be
I would so take you home with me! lol
Here is my fav pick up line.
If I ruled the world, I would change the alaphabet so U and I could be closer together
Awe  
Neways keep writing
And welkum to passions  

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12 posted 2001-05-23 04:28 PM


weclome to passions..that was sooo cute!!! and it gives a whole new perspective on the puckup line thing  hehe  awsome job!
              *KiMMiE*

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13 posted 2001-05-23 04:29 PM


this is too cute to not put in my library!
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14 posted 2001-05-23 05:00 PM


hey...great job on the poem...haha...we as GUYS gotta fight back!! ...haha i enjoyed this a lot...keep writing...and welcome to passions... ...?

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15 posted 2001-05-23 05:37 PM


Great poem, Well done I really enjoyed the read... welcome to passions...

Zu

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16 posted 2001-05-23 06:52 PM


Welcome to Passions.
Well done on the poem. Hope to see more of you.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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I admire it daily

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17 posted 2001-05-23 07:32 PM


wow hun people like your pick up line better than mine! well anyways babe talk to ya later! oh by the way do you want some craigs brother stickers?
Robin

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18 posted 2001-05-23 07:42 PM


yeah hook me up yo thanx
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19 posted 2001-05-23 07:48 PM


This was too funny...this pick-up line trend is now a legend.  Welcome to the madness!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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20 posted 2001-05-24 02:37 PM


Omg this is the third poem today i read about pick-up lines...what is with this?? LoL i dont even care about them...i think their kinda dumb and corny but i dont WHINE ::cough cough::
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21 posted 2001-05-24 10:00 PM


W-E-L-C-O-M-E T-O P-A-S-S-I-O-N-S!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
enjoyed the poem..there seems to be a trend with the "pick-up-lines" poems...hahaha..am i right?..hey acarly i think there IS a conspiracy!!!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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22 posted 2001-05-25 01:45 PM


hey you sexy thing where ya been all my life? well babe i know where you been lol! i could't resist heheh!love ya babe!
robin

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23 posted 2001-05-29 02:31 PM


Welcome to Passions!!!

First post, and you're going into my library already.  Just one out of 5 in there now.  AFter all the poems I've already read.  Great write and hope you enjoy staying here in PIP.  keep writing

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

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24 posted 2001-05-29 07:58 PM


wow, this is soo cute!! I bet you are too!! U can try one of those lines on me!! ttyl!!

tiffany~~

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25 posted 2001-05-29 08:12 PM


sorry lucky hes mine!hehe
robin

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26 posted 2001-05-29 10:06 PM


Hey I'm not taken by anyone yet lol
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27 posted 2001-05-29 10:35 PM


love it, love it, love it, love it!!!
ahh, it's cute!!

hey, I don't mind pick-up lines either, providing you say them in a not-so cheesy way, know what I mean?

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

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28 posted 2001-05-29 10:43 PM


Great first post!  That's really cute!  Have you tried all of those lines?  Some sounds pretty original to me(Or perhaps it is just my boy-deprived life) I loved your poem and I will keep an eye out for more of yours.  Great job!
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29 posted 2001-05-30 05:07 AM


well jimmy i'm taking you here and now so there!hehe!love ya babe!
robin

  


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30 posted 2001-05-30 10:13 AM


just taking stuff is theft lol
right
I'm callin the cops

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31 posted 2001-05-30 01:16 PM


babe taking you is not a crime!if only you knew!
robin

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32 posted 2001-05-30 03:07 PM


hey hun,
i thought this was really sweet. i really liked it alot. i hope there is a somone you worte this too, b/c if so there really lucky to have a guy like you. i know if a guy told me a chessy pick up line, i would laugh, and go out with him, i think they are so cute. they always make me laugh. i love ppl that make me laugh. and this poem sure made me laugh, thanks for that.  
~!kellie!~

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33 posted 2001-05-31 08:35 AM


nope this wasnt written for anyone. just a rebuttle
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34 posted 2001-06-16 02:24 PM


Welcome to Passions!  Cute post.. heh.  I'm glad you decided to join us here, and I can't wait to read more.

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What can I say? That was so great! I don't have a problem with those pick up lines... it's the stupid (and vulgar) ones I hate!   That was soooo cute!
Rhonda  

"Who did that?" "Charlie and Blake." "Who's Charlie and Blake?" "Rhonda and Amy.""Great. There goes the school."

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