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Meggie1986
Junior Member

since 2001-05-22

Posts 41
California

0 posted 2001-05-22 11:09 PM

I gave you a smile and story.
I thought it was fair exchange.
I walked with you through the morning.
I hoped it would never change.

You gave me a look and I knew I had won.
I could make my desires come true.
You walked with me though the evening.
But you never knew what I knew.

I'm sorry I asked for your kindness.
I'm sorry I asked you to stay.
And now we've forever parted,
I'm wishing we'd stayed that way.

I'll never again ask for kindness,
I'll never beg for an end.
You'll stay in my heart forever,
My only, my darling, my friend.

~Meaghan
*One meets his destiny often in the road he takes to avoid it.

fozzyozzy
Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

1 posted 2001-05-22 11:13 PM

Welcome to Passions. You have a great first post here. I'm impressed. I especially liked the last stanza and last rhyme. Keep posting

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
Robert Fr

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-05-23 01:08 AM

beautiful poem...i loved the ending as i liked the whole poem overall...i really enjoyed this...hope to see more...and WELCOME to PASSIONS Meaghan!

...cya~

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-05-23 01:25 AM

I really liked this poem. I thought you did very well on it, especially in the last stanza. I also like that little quote in the end, which I presume to be your signature.
Well done here.
Welcome to Passions and enjoy your stay! I hope to see you post and reply in the near future.

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I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-05-31 07:34 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Great to have you with us. I hope you enjoy reading poems, as well as sharing some of your works too. You do write beautifully, that I can tell from you first post. I like it a lot, so keep it up and please keep sharing.

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

5 posted 2001-05-31 07:49 PM

i liked the way how the poem flows beautifully here...

a belated welcome to passions and do share more of your work with us, yea

[This message has been edited by faterider (edited 05-31-2001).]

AngelPoet87
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 280
Indy

6 posted 2001-05-31 08:22 PM

Such a sweet ending!

~sugarpie313~
Member

since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

7 posted 2001-05-31 08:34 PM

this is soooooooooo good! i love the way you create a story, and how you express your feelings well... great job. it has an overall good message. one that i can relate to

Valerie

Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

8 posted 2001-06-01 12:20 PM

This didn't drag out at the beginning... it jumped straight on into the point. I think that is very important in the poem, it defined a flow very early on as far as taking in the message was concerned. You laid it all out very well, so that it was easily absorbed. I like that.
Welcome to Passions in Poetry. Can't wait to see more!

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

9 posted 2001-06-03 02:33 AM

Welcome To Passions!!!!

This was a great first post and i cant wait to see more so keep em comin!

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

10 posted 2001-06-03 04:39 PM

Great first poem keep up the great work!
Lauren

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

11 posted 2001-06-03 05:26 PM

I really enjoyed the entire piece, especially the last stanza! The whole poem has great flow and meaning. Great job, and hope to see more from you!

Over and out,

¤ ¢H@§ïÑg RåIñ ¤

"If I find in myself desires which nothing in this world can satisfy, the only logical explanation is that i was made for another world."
-C.S.Lewis

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

12 posted 2001-06-16 01:54 PM

Welcome to Passions! These are beautiful thoughts. I enjoyed this very much, and I hope to read more from you soon. Thanks for sharing... and welcome again

--Marie

"You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced, the girl of my nightmares.
You're an Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection. Anorexic

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