This Child in The Looking Glass

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Teen Poetry #4

This Child in The Looking Glass

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2001-05-22 10:45 PM

A child stands alone,
As the people pass on by,
Chilled to the very bone,
This child is left to cry.

Will no one save this child,
And keep her safe from harm?
To protect her from the wild,
And win her with their charm?

A child stands alone,
Not knowing where to go,
If this child could have flown,
What secrets could she show?

Will they let this child die,
Not knowing what she holds?
Will they stand and let her cry,
While her heart inward folds?

A child stands alone,
And watches it all pass,
If only they had only known,
This child in the looking glass.

"No one holds command over me.
No man.
No god.
No prince."

Meggie1986
Junior Member

since 2001-05-22

Posts 41
California

1 posted 2001-05-22 10:50 PM

Brilliant! Your poem is full of wonderful images. I especially love the third stanza.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-05-23 01:14 AM

I thought you did very well with this poem. I liked how you ended it too. Very well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-05-23 01:15 AM

the really liekd this whole poem...this was well written...thanks for sharing it...and hope to see more...

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if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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