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fozzyozzy
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since 2001-03-15
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Lessburg Virginia

0 posted 2001-05-22 10:41 PM


Orange skye

Gray dead hand
Falling twisting turning
From majesty's land
Of fire burning bright
Like Tiger's soulfull sight
Natures and lids
Closing to its eye
Shutting its orange skye

Gray dead hand  
Clawing screaming grasping
Descension so grand
To bring silent eye to close
Blue minds and gray falsely arose
Hiding behind mountains
But this orange devil shall fall
Life restarts no orange at all

Gray Dead hand
Twisted Turned Fallen
Such beaten gritty sand
Moment passage into memory
I remember how that hand grasped me
Orange skye gone forever
Life continues without sun
I cry you cry when day done

"The heart can think of no devotion
Greater than being shore to ocean
Holding the curve of one position
Counting an endless repetition"
Robert Fr

© Copyright 2001 Sean Michael DeFlora - All Rights Reserved
Meggie1986
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since 2001-05-22
Posts 41
California
1 posted 2001-05-22 10:54 PM


Fantastic!  Another beautiful poem.  The last few lines really stand out.  Great job!
Dopey Dope
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2 posted 2001-05-23 01:11 AM


I thought you did extremely well on this one fozzy. I hope to read more soon.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?
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3 posted 2001-05-23 01:14 AM


great job...dark...yet nice...i enjoyed the read... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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