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Cycle of Love |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world 
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As she sits upon her throne no one cares, she's all alone. Fame and fortune, still alone, She needs somebody, A place to call home. She stares out in the streets, sees alot of people she'd like to meet- but she never makes a move. Scared stiff, she sits and waits, Thinking all the while, "This must be fate." But wait! up comes a gentle soul. It's a baby boy with heart of gold, he has no mother, nor food to eat. She takes him in and treats him well, she loves him so much, everyone can tell. She sends him to school, she stays by his side, he fills her heart with so much pride. Then one day, Cold and gray, God sent an angel to take her away. her little baby boy, now grown, suddenly had to face life on his own. Standing quietly at her throne, He peers in weeping, No one is home. The cycle will begin again, for in her, he found a friend. now standing on the porch right there, is a little girl with long blonde hair. She is what his heart was waiting for, as slowly, he opens his door. [This message has been edited by stace_co2003 (edited 05-23-2001).] |
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Terryloveiris_85 Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 61The middle of nowhere |
I loved this!  this poem really rocked!Great job!  ~Iris  i'd give eternity to be by your side-goo goo dolls/City of Angels soundtrack |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done. I liked this......very well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
wow...this was great!!!...and so profound too!..i enjoyed it a lot..especially how it cyles back onto itself. more says i! "Life is not long and boring, |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
well done...i enjoyed this poem a lot...thanks for the read and hope to see more...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
hey! thanks for all of the replies... yeah, I wrote it sitting in biology class right after my exam...I was that bored... cya later.. *s* Stace |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Stace: Impressive writing. You've done a good job portraying a metaphor I often used[cycles] as being beautiful and great, rather than mundane and morbidly boring, as I often portray them. A very beautiful poem. Keep up the good work trying to rhyme things. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Well done great poem, I really enjoyed the read... although I think the footnote might detract from this slightly... let people make there own minds up... just a suggestion anyway Zu |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
*~Very Nice ~* |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
since I'm sitting here bored out of my mind...lemme give you a bita background on this...I was sitting in my biology room right after I had taken my exam, and I just felt the need to write...and this is what resulted. I hope you liked it!! *s* Stace I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. [This message has been edited by stace_co2003 (edited 05-28-2001).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
And people say schools are useless! Wait..that might have been me.  You've written a marvellous poem here. I like it quite alot. Keep on wasting time in school.  ~AF~ Know what you want. Become your real self. |
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