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Ina
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since 2000-10-09
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Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-05-22 12:33 PM




Listen to my heart beat
press your head against
the plaster wall
do you feel the vibrations
of my sadness?
i bet you don't
you want me to keep promises
that you know i'll fail in
keeping
you have so many expectations for
me
can you just stop?!
stop with all your wise words
I really don't want to have
to do things cause
ill keep you happy\
while im misreable
your too smart
its funny
how you even talk to me
anymore
life would be a lot simpler
with one less breath,
two less arms, two less legs
one less head, one less body
you really shouldn't stay around
me it isn't healthy
maybe i ought to go
away from you all.......


Regina

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

© Copyright 2001 Regina Levy - All Rights Reserved
keoni
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since 2000-10-16
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Up in the mountains in the NFC
1 posted 2001-05-22 02:25 PM


How'd this get so far down the page without any responses. Regina, awesome as always. The ending was killer. I hope everything's OK.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Ina
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Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada
2 posted 2001-05-22 07:13 PM


thanks jon...your the only one (sniff)

Regi a

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

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3 posted 2001-05-22 08:43 PM


Not your best regi, but nonetheless it did have your feelings deeply within it and I liked it. It's kind of sad.....are you ok? if not let's talk.
Hope to read more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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4 posted 2001-05-23 02:26 AM


this was filled with sincere emotions...i enjoyed this  alot(the peom of course)...and keep writing and stay strong ina... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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5 posted 2001-05-23 02:58 AM


awwwwww hugs! how sad but i hear ya girly! i feel the same way all the time!
robin

I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL!

anonymousfemale
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6 posted 2001-05-23 10:00 AM


It's got quite a strong message but for you Regina, you could strengthen the actual piece up a little.

With just a tad more work it could be perfect.

Thanks for the read.  

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
7 posted 2001-05-24 02:50 PM


I know how you feel...stay strong ::hugs::
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