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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I think about "why?" They worry about lost loves I worry of God They worry about lost friends. Who is smart? Who is stupid? I just wonder why... "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This is really interesting, what you've expressed here. I think it's a little muddy, but i like its length, somehow appropriate to the theme. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked the poem...but to be honest tho...i strongly disagree on what u said in this poem...yea...anyways...hope to see more...  ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I disagree with some of it also. I dont agree with saying that anyone is stupid for worrying about something, simply because I dont know that I know the whole story. Overall, though, it had a good point. *~*Amanda*~* |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
very interesting poem, this one required several readings before i felt like i had absorbed it all. you bring up some interesting thought in this, i like it. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Short, but interesting. I'm not sure I completely get it...but that's prolly just dummy me. LOL Keep writing em so I can keep reading em. Jenn "If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I understand exactly what you are saying, Frac. What worry implies is that someone expects an event to occur that will have a negative impact on them somehow. Therefore I don't think you are referring to "mourning" lost friends, rather when you say "worrying" for them you refer somehow to the afterlife? I think you threw the reference to God in there to, in a way, hint towards the religious theme of the original concept you were introducing. Good job on that, if that's what you intended. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Aren't love and friends a blessing from God? Well regardless, I enjoyed this poem. Thought provoking stuff.....geesh frac hehe. Well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Meggie1986 Junior Member
since 2001-05-22
Posts 41California |
Humm... makes you think. I wonder why too. Great poem, this is short, but right to the point and that is part of what makes it so effective. A short question that may seem simple, but has a lot of deeper meaning. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Thanks guys, for the replies. It was indeed a religious theme. I was attemting to compare and contrast the differences between what I typically worry about[metaphysical problems and the meaning of life] and what others seem to worry about. The poem then concludes by asking the reader to decide for him/herself who is the dumber one. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
fractal, i liked the sentiments here but i can't help feeling that "dumb" is rather a strong word here... i mean, we are all different..just because my concerns are different from yours doesn't constitute me as dumb... just an opinion...  |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Sorry if this caused any problems [ie making people think they were dumb]. I meant this as an open comparison. Those who think about the philosophical issues all the time could be considered dumb for not enjoying life instead. Those who enjoy life all the time could be considered dumb for not trying to understand why they are there in the first place. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i heard you. |
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