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Mutter (villanelle)

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Child of the Stars
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0 posted 05-21-2001 02:27 PM       View Profile for Child of the Stars   Email Child of the Stars   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Child of the Stars

I kiss goodbye my Sunday afternoons
I'm touched again with life I've never seen
Companions are no longer my cocoon

The children hold the remnants of balloons
They've found beneath the valleys rich and green
I kiss goodbye my Sunday afternoons

From memories you see I am immune
I wonder what my mother really means
Companions are no longer my cocoon

I've known the flesh eternities too soon
The fault of all mutations is the gene
I kiss goodbye my Sunday afternoons

A bullet hits the glass of Mother's womb
We'll watch her weep upon the tragic scene
Companions are no longer my cocoon

So take my heart and find my perilune
I'm lost and need your words to intervene
I kiss goodbye my Sunday afternoons
Companions are no longer my cocoon

© Copyright 2001 Carly Anne Van Dort - All Rights Reserved
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Very well done here carly! This was such a wonderful poem. You write so well and I constantly tell you this...so believe it woman, believe it.
This one was great!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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2 posted 05-21-2001 03:54 PM       View Profile for Elusive^   Email Elusive^   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elusive^'s Home Page   View IP for Elusive^

not sure if it was intended..but sadness and I think, regret and longing seeps from your words..
This is something that's like a crystal..people see different colours when holding it at different angles to the light..

Keep writing..this is intriguing..


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I like the way Elusive described this piece, and I agree.  This was very very good, I liked it alot and it is going in my library.  I am curious as to what the form of this poem is though...

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this is amazing!  I especially loved the image of the womb.  The German title had a great effect with the reference later on.  Amazing

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?...hehe...carly this was beautiful...i enjoyed every second that i was reading it...thanks for the wonderful read...cya~... ...?

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Well done Carly, i enjoyed this immensely and you managed to develop the theme through out the poem... well done *in awe*  
Zu
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Wonderful, Carly. Especially the title. Very nice use of German there.  

You're a star, girl.  

~AF~

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beautiful writing carly, this is really amazing poetry    i loved every line of this, it goes straight to the library  

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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hey Carly, I really like this. . . it's got a good form, and you really understand how to use it well. . . it makes you think. . . and shows what happens when you leave that cocoon. . . it kinda reminded me of Emily Dickinson in a way, although she would have never written one this long!    But her style and tone are there. . .

excellent. . .

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Carly this was wonderful. i enjoyed it lots.
great job hunnAy. *hugs* love ya muchs!
tiff

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I want to look into your eyes and see you smile at me
I want to hear you say "Well done"

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Simply beautiful words, Carly.  I enjoyed this so much.  I love villanelles!  This one's another one that's goin back to the first page where it belongs.  Beautiful work.  I enjoyed this.
Well done.

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You're an Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection.  Anorexic

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I just love villanelle's and this one is no exception.
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I thank you, Zu. (and a belated thanks to anyone who replied above and might read this)

empty arms
and half a soul to go
                     -el sol
                        --Zwan

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Two years later is beyond belated.  

Oh, and did anyone get the double-meaning of the title???  I thought that was brilliant!!
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