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fearing-laughter
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0 posted 2001-05-21 01:37 AM


some feel but not i.
never let the emotions seep inside.
they'll only haunt you,
eat away at what remains of your soul.

many love, many hate
it all depends on the turn of your fate.
the foolish love, the foolish die.
love is life's biggest lie.

emotions are pointless
rendering your mind useless
never ever say
"I love you"

-fear-


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1 posted 2001-05-21 02:16 AM


quite depressing poetry. I know you must be feeling a lot of pain. This could also be from the past. Time heals, but not all wounds.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

LoneWolf
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2 posted 2001-05-21 08:42 AM


WOW, i really liked this i know exactly what you are talking about in this poem. good work.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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3 posted 2001-05-21 09:46 AM


This is an excellent write, but I feel like the poem got cut off.  Maybe add a few more lines.  Well, that's my opinion    Thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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4 posted 2001-05-21 11:19 AM


Well done. I really liked the poem...I felt it, but I disagree with the ending...

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

banburycross
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5 posted 2001-05-21 01:15 PM


this is beautifully written, i could feel a lot of pain in all the lines in this piece.  i know how easy it is to block everything out to keep the bad things from hurting so much, but without loving some things in life, life seems empty to me.  i try to take the bad with the good and keep loving life.  write me if you ever need to talk and smile  

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

vixengrl04
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6 posted 2001-05-21 05:30 PM


This was really good, I love the way you wrote it.  Nice work.  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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