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chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

0 posted 2001-05-21 12:00 PM

Today
I left a larger angel
In the pure, white snow.
Yesterday
I came home
With a scar on my nose.
The day before
I was only 30 inches tall
What's gotten into me?

Tomorrow
I leave my mother
For a bus to another world.
The day after
I find my vision
Of life
Is nothing but a blur.
Day after day
I walk
In the rain.
What's gotten into me?

Childhood
Has passed me by.
My innocent dreams
Have taken to the sky.
Sleepless nights
Cloud over me
And it rains depression
Into the deep blue sea.

April no longer bursts
From the flowers of my youth.
Lips from my own children
No longer say the truth.

I don't mind you
Calling me a child.
Because that's who I am
And how I was all the while.

So I am the child
I am the angel in the snow
I am the kid with
The scar on his nose.
I was, and still am
30 inches tall
I have a mother and father
Who catch me when I fall.

And I know
I left them
And I know
I'm bound to lose them
Again.
And I know
How life will be
If I don't catch it
When it flies by me.

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Again...I don't think this makes much sense. All in favor? Say I. *Background: NOSE!*

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

1 posted 2001-05-21 12:07 PM

Wow i like this. it makes sense to me. i enjoyed this one. good job.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-05-21 12:13 PM

great poem...i relted to the poem alot...very good job...i enjoyed the read...thanks for sharing it...

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Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

3 posted 2001-05-21 02:26 AM

Your words speak truth and yet they stated in a poetic form. I enjoyed this very much.

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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-21 11:16 AM

I liked this one but it's not as good as some of your others. Nonetheless, the poem was well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

5 posted 2001-05-21 01:10 PM

i liked the cute images in this and i liked the central theme of this a lot. you wrote this poem very well, keep sharing your work with us all

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-06-05 03:13 PM

~*appluads*~ I love it when writers just lay down what they feel. This is really beautiful. Awesome poem

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

7 posted 2001-06-05 04:11 PM

this made me cry....extremely emotional write

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

8 posted 2001-06-10 11:32 AM

WHat an interesting poem....lovely!

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