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cherish
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swimming in fairy floss.......


0 posted 05-20-2001 11:35 PM       View Profile for cherish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for cherish




     This is my place
      Full of anxieties, fears and frustrations.
      The transgression of the mean.
      A complex spectrum full of angry shades of grey.

      Wishing to be rushed along, swift and sure
      Like the train that takes me away in the day
      And catapults me back at night.

      Where things lie beneath the skin,
      And crawl behind my eyes.
      Where you see me cloistered in black
      Where I'm mourning the loss of me.

      Surrounded by nylon synthetic smiles,
      With carbonated,caffeine-free touches
      And polyester blended words.

      Where im slowly drowning-
      Drowning in the sea of energy contained
      Within a strong, waxed cardboard box

      This is my place
      Thanks but no thanks-Thank-you
      This place is mine
      This place is for me.
© Copyright 2001 cherish - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 05-20-2001 11:42 PM       View Profile for anonymous albert ?   Email anonymous albert ?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymous albert ?

yaayyy!!!! its cherish...go cherish! go cherish! go go go..ok...*stops before it gets out of hand* ...hehe...but w'sup glad u posting again ...well on the poem i liked this...very different...but interesting...also enjoyable read as well...very discriptive and well discribed...awesome job...and hope to see more... i mean like right now! ...cya~

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

LoneWolf
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2 posted 05-21-2001 12:04 AM       View Profile for LoneWolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoneWolf

Hey, i liked this one a lot. i enjoyed this one. very descriptive as albert said. so i liked it and good job.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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3 posted 05-21-2001 11:21 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Cherish, well done. As always you amaze me with this poem. I have read it before and aided you a bit, but the final product exceeds all expectations....Very well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

banburycross
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4 posted 05-21-2001 01:17 PM       View Profile for banburycross   Email banburycross   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for banburycross

very cool images in this poem, i enjoyed the read a lot.  you did an excellent job writing this, thatnk you for sharing it  

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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5 posted 05-21-2001 04:41 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Nice to see you posting again Cherish   I really enjoyed the read... well done.
Zu
vixengrl04
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6 posted 05-21-2001 04:46 PM       View Profile for vixengrl04   Email vixengrl04   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vixengrl04

You did really good with this Cherish, I enjoyed it for sure.  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

cherish
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7 posted 05-22-2001 07:35 PM       View Profile for cherish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherish

thanx for your comments everyone.... ....be happy to know that it's been well appreciated!!
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8 posted 06-10-2001 07:38 PM       View Profile for Acies   Email Acies   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Acies

Cherish --- I'm amazed.  I didn't know you had it in you.  But now I'm stunned.  This is amazing.  Excellent write my friend
~*standing ovation*~

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic

cherish
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9 posted 06-12-2001 01:09 AM       View Profile for cherish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherish

awwwwww hey acire..you dont have to do that now do you..
i was just surprised seeing this back up..and went "who on earth is reading my poetry..they must be crazy!"..hahhaa...well..i was half right wasnt i?.. ...thanks for enjoying it acire..im honoured..trully!
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10 posted 06-12-2001 05:59 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

very cool write  
Marshalzu
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11 posted 06-13-2001 01:24 PM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

This deserves a few more replies...
anonymousfemale
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12 posted 06-14-2001 12:05 PM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

*breaks into uncontrollable sobbing* I missed this!!!  

ahem...sorry 'bout that. Cherish!! This is great. The whole theme set around this is excellently written.

Be proud. Tell Johnnie Howard! He'll be proud too.  

In all seriousness, you should be proud of this piece. Lovin' it.  

Well done! So in my library.

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

keoni
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13 posted 06-14-2001 12:38 PM       View Profile for keoni   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for keoni

This was awesome! Man, this was so good. I liked it so much. IT'S in the library.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

angel_2401
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14 posted 06-14-2001 01:49 PM       View Profile for angel_2401   Email angel_2401   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit angel_2401's Home Page   View IP for angel_2401

I really like this one! I hope I get the chance to read more of your poems!  

I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem.

cherish
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15 posted 06-14-2001 11:29 PM       View Profile for cherish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherish

thanx you guys!!!!.... ....
DarkSilver
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16 posted 06-16-2001 12:03 AM       View Profile for DarkSilver   Email DarkSilver   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DarkSilver

there is no way you can be the cherish I know so cuz she couldn't write that well, I'm guessing you aren't and leah just knows you for another reason. but the poem was great very effectively tells about the teenage world today.
cherish
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17 posted 06-18-2001 01:14 AM       View Profile for cherish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherish

wow...dark!!..there's another cherish out there in the big big world?...awesome!..hehehe..no i think the cherish you and leah know is erm...me...sorry to burst your bubble sweetie.. ...im glad you enjoyed those few seconds it took you to read it..

heheh...i forgot to thank marshal for the bump...*hugs*

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18 posted 06-19-2001 12:47 AM       View Profile for Fading Away   Email Fading Away   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Fading Away

Wowers, Cherish!!  This is AWESOME!  I loved this poem.  Your words are beautiful.  You rock, and this poem rocks.  Excellent work!

--Marie

"Imagine a pageant...
In my head the flesh seems thicker,
Sandpaper tears corrode the filth,
And I need you now somehow." --Silverchair

cherish
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19 posted 06-21-2001 02:40 AM       View Profile for cherish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherish

*blushes*...thank you marie  
Postman Pat
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20 posted 08-06-2001 12:54 AM       View Profile for Postman Pat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Postman Pat

I have no idea what you're going on about here Cheri-bebe. All the poems I've read of yours so far have been really depressing-but I think that this one has topped them all. It sux to know that you're feeling so Sh!tty. I mean you hardly SOUND or LOOK like that when you're at usyd. It makes me wonder what I'm missing. You do know that I'm here for you- you don't need to feel so...so whatever it is that you're feeling that makes you want to write like that.
Good poem though-everyone else seemed to enjoy it a lot too!
Low Man's Lyric
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21 posted 09-06-2001 09:45 PM       View Profile for Low Man's Lyric   Email Low Man's Lyric   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Low Man's Lyric's Home Page   View IP for Low Man's Lyric

Ok you told me that you got this poem published in a magazine because it was good...it isn't just good, ITS AWESOME!!! Lovely job here Cherish, its really really really really terrific  , do you know where I can get a hold of one of those magazines? I wonder if they have that magazine here in Canada? Well any how great job on this poem and I see why it got published.

Don't ever compare yourself to others - in most cases they are more messed up than you are!

cherish
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22 posted 09-07-2001 12:33 AM       View Profile for cherish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherish

Patty- you dont even come in here anymore!! ...but yeah i know you're there bud, lol too bad you cant frame the magazine  

Aaron- thanks you   it aint THAT good but yeah im really glad you liked it- you want me to send you over a copy?

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anonymousfemale
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23 posted 09-22-2001 01:03 PM       View Profile for anonymousfemale   Email anonymousfemale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for anonymousfemale

Hello  

Just though I'd reply to this again considering it was in my library.  
After reading this about 4 times over I've come to the conclusion that yes, I like it.   it's so dark and very unhappy which is always a good thing because happy poetry bites.

Take care of yourself and if you lose your arms, don't worry! They'll grow back eventually.

~AF~

Please put waste in a bin
2001 McDonalds Corporation
Printed in Australia (12913)

 
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