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i can't get over you |
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LCsftball16 Junior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 39 |
I look inside only to find, You, the one on my mind. I hate the way you seep into my thoughts, Like a gift the devil brought. There ARE times I'm missing you, And missing all the things you do. But reminiscing is dragging me low, And filling my heart with pain and sorrow. Really, I'm missing you bad, All the great times we had. Like the first time we met, Almost the only time I don't regret. When you and I flirted so aggressively, Yet you touched me so tenderly. Has the thought ever occurred to you, My love for you WAS beyond true. Knowing you messed me up after the whole "Let's be friends," I can't get over you and there's no end. .:*:. You'll always be my first love .:*:. sorry guys, this isn't my BEST work. i don't know if it's even worth posting!! but i'll give it a shot! |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
!!WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! ur gonna love it here i think u did a great job on this poem! it was very worth postin!! i especially liked this line: "I hate the way you seep into my thoughts, Like a gift the devil brought." ^ i liked that alot! *points* the words you made caps added a great punch too! newayz.... i liked this  tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” I want to look into your eyes and see you smile at me I want to hear you say "Well done" [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-20-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
hey! welcome to passions  i liked this poem...full of emotions...it was very enjoyable read...and i hope to see more...and keep writing,posting.replying...cya~...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180 |
Really good poem  I liked it alot. And don't worry, you'll get over him...after some time. Things Takes Time, as always. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
hey this is how i felt when my ex told me he was in love with my best friend. great job. robin I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to passions.....I enjoyed this first poem and hope to see you reply and post more! Check your mail for a special message! Dopey_Dope/Moderator  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Rydr16 New Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 5 |
what are you saying, not a good poem? its very good actually. i understand exactly how you feel, i still have not forgot my first love, and no matter what pple say, about how you'll get over it, your thinking in your mind that you never will, the truth is, you may not get over your feelings for him for a very long time, but eventually, you'll move on, and find someoneyou care about and be happy again. i stillremmember my first love, but i am in another relationship of 7 months and have grown happy, you will too. so keep smiling =) -dee |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
this was very good and u created a lot of good images and made some very good points. Great Job!!! Valerie Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you |
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helen smith Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 240 |
I liked it too LC... the whole messy scene just seeps into my mind too.. thank you |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
 WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! This is pretty good! I can DEFINATELY relate to it, so of COURSE I like it *LOL* Good post, hope to see more from you!  ,Suga "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
hey, i liked this a lot i can relate to it. good job It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Welcome to Passions!! this is a great first post, full of emotion. i'm looking forward to reading more, and i hope you keep posting and replying Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! Your first post is actually a good write. If this is not your best, I can't wait to see the good ones Hope you enjoy Passions in Poetry as much as we all do. keep sharing and happy reading "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Welcome to Passions I really liked this first post of yours "I hate the way you seep into my thoughts, Like a gift the devil brought." that part was my favorite out of it all...beautiful....Keep on posting! I cant wait to see more from u. |
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Terryloveiris_85 Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 61The middle of nowhere |
 i didn't get there first or second or third.......anyway !  welcome to passions!  hope you will enjoy your stay! ~Iris i'd give eternity to be by your side-goo goo dolls/City of Angels soundtrack goodness is found in the heart, not the money. [This message has been edited by Terryloveiris_85 (edited 05-22-2001).] |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Welcome! I look forward to more from you SEA |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
A little late, I know  Welcome to Passions! Very well done first post. This is very honest and open. I like the raw emotion... nicely done! I can't wait to read more. --Marie "You're the girl of my nightmares. |
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