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MoeRocko
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since 2001-04-25
Posts 166
West Virginia

0 posted 2001-05-19 05:08 PM



I tire of life.
Nauseating repitition
Am I doomed to a life of
this
Where are the changes?
Where are the mountains?
One day when I'm layed to rest
I hope no one picks of my life
to carry on what I haven't done

Where is my pot of gold?
I always see this rainbow
It's misleading beauty
will take me to Hell

I'll beat my own path
for to look for life
Hopefully I'll get somewhere
Peace, Love, and Baby Back Ribs

This Is Not Here

How do I know where to go when I don't know which way I'm facing

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TearsOfPearls
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since 1999-09-23
Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa
1 posted 2001-05-19 05:15 PM


Wow, this is so...so...twisted, but I like it. It is something different, keep it up  

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

Dopey Dope
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since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
2 posted 2001-05-19 05:39 PM


The ending made me smile. I thought this was a fun poem. I liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26
Posts 495
East Haddam, CT
3 posted 2001-05-19 06:51 PM


Well I really liked this piece but the ending kinda let me down a lil cuz I was expecting something like the rest of the poem.  It's cute though.  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27
Posts 946
viginia
4 posted 2001-05-20 02:55 PM


this is a little twisted, but i really like this piece.  your style of writing continuously fascinates me, i love reading your poetry. great job on this, keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

anonymous albert ?
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Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-05-21 01:28 AM


yep...definitly twisted...haha...and the ending i liked ...keep writing... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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