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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2001-05-19 04:16 PM


Do you allow me
To stare deep within your soul
And never have to let
All the magic that I find go
And is it possible for me to kiss your tender heart
As I hold it in my hands noticing that it's about to fall apart
Would it even be too much to ask
If I were to allow my body to fall under this hypontic trance
And forever dance
With the sweet memory of your smile embedded within my soul
Would you even be offeneded
If I were to get down on my knees and pray
And tell you all my eyes are willing to give away
I want to be forever enveloped in your irrestible charms
And held forever in your comforting arms
But do you allow me to finally give it all up
To let it all in
And fall prey to this delicious sin

"Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night"

~Crash and Burn~

© Copyright 2001 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
thedarkangel
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1 posted 2001-05-19 04:22 PM


that's beautiful. keep posting if they're like this.
love peace and eyeliner
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2 posted 2001-05-19 05:31 PM


And they are all like that.
Another wonderful poem!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

vixengrl04
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3 posted 2001-05-19 07:24 PM


This was beautifully written, I really like it alot.  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

chasing rain
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4 posted 2001-05-19 08:07 PM


smooth work.   Great job with the rhyming cuplets (*sigh* am I spelling that right?)! Keep it up! *thumbs up*
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5 posted 2001-05-20 03:13 PM


i agree that this is beautifully written, you did a wonderful jon on this.  i loved the imagery you used in this, you did a nice job with that.  keep sharing your work with all of us  

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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6 posted 2001-05-21 01:43 AM


beautiful writing...wonderful poem...i enjoyed this a lot...hope to see more... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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7 posted 2001-05-25 10:39 PM


This was beautifully written and the title was absolutely intruiging....good job  
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