why can't i make you see???

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Teen Poetry #4

why can't i make you see???

~sugarpie313~
Member

since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

0 posted 2001-05-19 01:33 PM

Why can't I make you see
I'm the girl for you?
I am the one you love
And to me you bid adieu!

You told yourself that day
It would be too much work,
So here I am, alone again
All because of your quirk.

So here's my farewell to you
Maybe you'll remember this one,
Most of the things you do or say
Cannot be undone.

Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you

[This message has been edited by ~sugarpie313~ (edited 05-19-2001).]

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-05-19 05:08 PM

Did you mean ADO, or adieu....something like that?
Anyway nicely done!
I liked this one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

2 posted 2001-05-20 02:38 PM

well, when i was reading this what popped into my head was that you ended this very nicely and wrote it very well. so that's what i'm writing

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Suga_Baby
Member

since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

3 posted 2001-05-20 04:11 PM

Once again, I FEEL you girl! I totally know how you feel... UGH... freaking ex's! GO AWAY!!! Stupid Paul... stupid Freaking Frank.... GRRRRRRR!!!
HEHEHE I like this Val, nice work!

,
Sara

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

4 posted 2001-05-20 04:43 PM

good one here...it kinda makes me smile to know he said it wouldnt work but you KNOW he'll never forget you

ahh you're just a constant reminder of what he could have had but nope..he screwed it up..oh well, lol sorry that just happened to me...i was just rambling

newho..great job, keep posting

*dq

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-05-21 02:03 AM

nicely done...i enjoyed the read and i'm glad you posting again...keep writing...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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