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MoeRocko
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since 2001-04-25
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West Virginia

0 posted 2001-05-18 10:37 PM


~For my friend Jamie Karnes~
June 9 1984 - November 16 1997

Hi there old friend
Tell me how have you been
We all have missed you
and the way you grin

A Day is neccessary every now and then
When the sun moves on, it gives life back again
Fly on, Fly on, Fly on my friend
Go on and live again

Day after day, night after night
I second guess why I felt this way

A Long look in the mirror
We come face to face
Wishing all the love we took for granted
Now we don't even have a day

Life without you, All the love you passed our way
The angels have waited, for so long
Now they have their way
I know I'll see you again
Take your place.........

Castles made of sand slip into Sea eventually...

Why do people remind me of vacuums?

© Copyright 2001 Ewok Enterprise - All Rights Reserved
obscurity of cloud
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since 2001-05-11
Posts 294
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1 posted 2001-05-19 12:28 PM


This is a really touching poem for your loss.  Writing is always my favorite way of coping; i hope you have found an outlet here as well.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

knightlyshadows
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since 2001-04-14
Posts 791
obscured vision
2 posted 2001-05-19 12:39 PM


*hugs* i love you. if u ever need to talk im here for you ewok.
i think you did a great job on this. im sure it means alot to your friend. this goes to my library as a reminder.
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I want to look into your eyes and see you smile at me
I want to hear you say "Well done"

Godsend_1
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since 2001-04-19
Posts 247
great state of illinois
3 posted 2001-05-19 01:57 AM


rock one ewok you have in incredible talent man and if ya ever need a bud i would say you can come to me but we already are buds so just come to me if ya need to talk ok love ya man *hugs*

ben

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be..so deal with it
to make the world the greatest place is the perfect dream in

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27
Posts 946
viginia
4 posted 2001-05-19 11:04 AM


you have a really interesting and unique style with a lot of your poems, it really makes me pay close attention to every word.  i would critique the flow a little, but thet way this flowed is what made it interesting to me.  good writing and keep sharing your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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Member Patricius
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
5 posted 2001-05-19 04:07 PM


This was sad....my concolences about your friend even though it was long ago.
I'm sure he'dve loved it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymous albert ?
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6 posted 2001-05-21 02:35 AM


this is sad but yet u written it nicely i enjoyed the poem...and thanks for sharing such piece i wish u the best...and keep writing... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

7 posted 2001-05-21 10:01 AM


You know..this is really touching...it really is.

Glad I stopped by.

K

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