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HeAvEnS AnGeL
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since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

0 posted 2001-05-18 01:18 AM

I see you everyday,
And yet you have never noticed me.
I stare at you,
And you stare right past me.
Your smiles in my direction,
Aren't meant for me.
It's like there is a lock on my heart,
And only you posess the key.
I see you in the halls,
Running your fingers through her hair,
If i fell off the planet,
Would you even care?
I am better than her,
In more than one way.
I would stay with you,
Each and every day.
If You took the time,
You would see,
That i am for you,
And you are for me.
But untill then,
Invisible i will stay,
Hoping you will notice me someday.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-18 01:24 AM

beautiful...and emotional as well...i really like your writing...your poems are something i realte to which is great

...i hope to see more...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Poet on Acid
Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 325
Florida, USA

2 posted 2001-05-18 01:33 AM

nice, Seems a reoccuring theme for people. Loving someone who not only doesn't love them back but doesn't even notice. Great work. Things that many people can relate to are always good subjects.

"It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶ØÊ†<

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-05-18 01:37 AM

Nice. Makes me wonder who it is about.

Well I'm glad you decided to share this.
The title is marvelous to this poem.  I urge everyone to keep the title in mind when reading through this, it is great because it observes that you are not invisible, but the person is BLIND, thus shifting responsibility of the lack of him seeing you onto his own perception.
Very, very good job with vagueness here... I'm incredibly impressed with the title of this.  I love hidden things to analyze.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

4 posted 2001-05-18 09:30 AM

This poem is great. I can relate to it a lot. I love all of your poems so far. Keep it up!

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow. I feel kinda sorry for it...

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

5 posted 2001-05-18 10:44 AM

Aww this was so sad!! But i really like this one cuz i've felt the same exact way a few times..its such an annoying feeling isnt it?? Its like u have no control...Great poem and thanks for sharing

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

6 posted 2001-05-18 01:49 PM

after allan went on an on about the title, i thought about it and i am forced to a agree with him, the title works very well with this piece. this is really sad, i hope that everything works out for you.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-05-19 02:42 PM

This is a good poem! I enjoyed this very much!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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