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chasing rain
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0 posted 2001-05-17 11:49 PM


Night comes
And light ceases to exist.
Stars fade in the background.
All around, it is silent,
And the sky becomes a canopy
Of secrecy.
The only light
That guides me
The only light
That binds me
The only light
I can see
Is the darkside
Of the moon.

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1 posted 2001-05-18 03:00 AM


yes you are right and you wrote it well...thanks for the read...i did enjoyed this...keep writing... ...?

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~*brittt*~
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2 posted 2001-05-18 08:48 AM


Very beautiful. I love those descriptive words you used. It helped me imagine.... Well done.
~britt~

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3 posted 2001-05-19 12:18 PM


You used such beautiful words in this...wonderfully done.
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4 posted 2001-05-19 04:32 PM


VERY well done....I loved this one actually. The ending hit me...Ca-POW!
Hope to see more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

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5 posted 2001-05-27 04:01 PM


~*applauds*~
very good write here Leah
Very very impressive
keep it up

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

stace_co2003
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6 posted 2001-05-27 04:08 PM


geez!!!

another good one!! lol, does it end? I don't think so!! and I hope not. keep it up!!  


*s*
Stace

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7 posted 2001-05-28 11:11 AM


I love the ending of this piece. It's just so dark that all you can do is smile.  

Thanks for an amazing read.

~AF~

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~ David Harold Fink ~

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