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Rach813
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0 posted 2001-05-17 04:10 PM


I took our love for granted
I should've been more careful
I had not realized what we had
Until it was gone

And thne I did something bad
I felt guilty about what I did
I know it made you feel sad
I didn't mean to do it

It just happened
I swear
I never meant to cheat you love
That you gave me for many days

I wish I had that love
That you gave
It was a mystery
How you loved me so

And I took that love for granted
I had not realized how bad I hurt you
Until it happened and then...
Your love was gone.

© Copyright 2001 Rachel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-17 05:06 PM


this is a sad situation hope things work out and the poem itself was nice...i enjoyed it and keep writing... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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2 posted 2001-05-17 05:15 PM


This is so sad, im sorry hun..."you never know what you had until its gone.." im sorry hun i hope things get better for u ::hugs::
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3 posted 2001-05-17 07:24 PM


I see a lot of guilt in you
well, i guess the importnat thing si s to learn from our experiences
it's nice to see that you feel sorry for hurting someone
that's a start
beautiful poem Rach
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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4 posted 2001-05-17 11:46 PM


Good work, I truly hope that you are improving the situation somehow.  It's upsetting to see someone in such a state.
Just be sure to not feel to angry at yourself for what you did, you also need comfort right now.  
Nice work on the poem, but since the message was more important than scheme here I'm drawing the line.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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5 posted 2001-05-18 12:44 PM


i hope that things get better, it sounds like you are really down on yourself at the moment.  *HUG*  you did a good job expressing yourself in this, keep sharing all your work with us.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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6 posted 2001-05-19 02:22 PM


Yep you do seem a bit guilty within the poem. I guess it shows you care a lot about the guy, so in that case I wish you the best of luck. I hope all works out in the end.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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