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thedarkangel
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0 posted 2001-05-17 01:22 PM


Nobody's perfect
Neither are you
so what gives you the right
to act the way you do?

So what if he's fat?
I don't care,
maybe I don't like
the colour of your hair

Me and Dan are a unit
we come as a pair
so knock him, knock me
try if you dare

A girl you teased
relentlessly for years
you calling her "Bendy"
ignoring her tears

You're a cow Josie
You've been one for years
but nobody said anything
silenced by fear

But now someone is
and I'll make myself clear;
"there's the door
Get out of my life... My dear.."

© Copyright 2001 laura - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-17 08:15 PM


sounds like it's a good thing to be telling this person good-bye!  
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2 posted 2001-05-17 09:52 PM


This is interesting, but the subject was a little hard for me to follow.  Maybe that's just my it's-not-Friday stupidity, but otherwise i liked your structure a lot.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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3 posted 2001-05-18 12:33 PM


I love "you are a cow."  I was drinking pepsi when I read that and it visited my nostrils.  
Just great work here, but I hope you see how you contradict yourself by criticizing her teasing of people, and then calling her a cow.  I'm sure she deserved it, hey, but maybe you should stop the hostility and prove what a good person you are.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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4 posted 2001-05-18 02:32 AM


hey great job on puuting and expressing yourself in this poem...i enjoyed the read...thanks for sharing it... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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5 posted 2001-05-18 08:51 AM


I really liked this, and I hope you can stand up to  this person for real and let them know how horrible they are being. I hate people like that. And i love people like you who finally get fed up.I admire your ambition.
~britt~

thedarkangel
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6 posted 2001-05-18 12:32 PM


i just wanted to say in response to Allan Riverwood, that she's relentlessly teased me and my friends for 5 years. i think it's perfectly safe to say that she is a cow and everyone who knows her knows it.
sorry to sort of... you know be mean!
angel
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7 posted 2001-05-19 01:38 PM


I live the cow line.....very flat out....very in your face....take that josie!

I enjoyed the poem very much and it's always good to stand strong and stick up for yourself.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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8 posted 2001-05-31 07:12 PM


You Go Girl

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

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9 posted 2001-06-03 10:34 PM


LoL Acire took the words right out of my mouth!!!!  
Meggie1986
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10 posted 2001-06-03 10:39 PM


hehe... ditto above.  That cow line!  Stand up to people like that, and it seems like you're doing a great job of that.  Very nice!

*One meets his destiny often in the road he takes to avoid it.

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