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Hidden
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Lost in my own world

0 posted 2001-05-17 09:21 AM


Clown

I feel like a clown
Acting all the time
See the painted on smile
It's not real
I'm not really happy
It's all an act
I'm made to put on
To fool the world
Make them think and assume
Nothing is wrong

But it's all a lie
Everything's wrong
I lost everything
And I'm supposed to be happy
I don't think so
I just can't do it
I'm all alone
Torn and crying

You don't see it
You think I'm ok
You don't wanna know
It's all an act I portray
But no nevermind
I don't need your help
I can't help it's your fault
You're a blind fool

Or maybe we both are
Both blind fools
I know you need me
Maybe I need you too.

**People who put themselves down are really pleading for someone else to pick them up and show them the way.**

[This message has been edited by Hidden (edited 05-18-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Renee - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-17 09:27 AM


Now THIS I like! This affected me very deeply on an emotional level. Everything you have written here is what I have to tell myself every morning. The bit that really caught my eye was that the line about you having lost everything. That I know all about.

Keep your head up though. If this person needs you as much as you think you need them, you'll pull through.

Smile.  

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

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2 posted 2001-05-17 09:28 AM


one day, oh one day, I'll be able to check the box that says "Add thread to library"...

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

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Welcome!   Please check your email for a special greeting!    SEA
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4 posted 2001-05-17 09:36 AM


I really liked this.  Great job.  I like your quote too.

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow.  I feel kinda sorry for it...

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5 posted 2001-05-17 10:57 AM


Welcome to passions great first post  
hope to see more of your work soon.
Zu

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6 posted 2001-05-17 11:03 AM


This is great; i sympathize with your feelings so much.  Wonderful first post...keep it up!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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7 posted 2001-05-17 04:38 PM


welcome to passions. love the poem so much
love peace and eyeliner
angel
-x-

Each Moment in time is a pinprick in eternity-Marcus Aurilius
Seize the day;think how many ladies passed up dessert on the Titanic!

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8 posted 2001-05-17 05:26 PM


this is such a emotional poem...i loved this piece cuz i go through this everyday and you have putted it so well...deep yet sincere...hope to see more... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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9 posted 2001-05-17 11:22 PM


It's too bad that you feel this way about yourself, if this IS about you.
The afterthought provokes a piece of advice from me.... sometimes it isn't the best way to get a pick-me-up, constantly putting yourself down.  I think you should try to bring others up, and not only might that also make you feel better about yourself for helping someone out, but they just might begin returning the favour.  
Once you can learn to love yourself again, your life will be something of a breeze.  Take it from me.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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10 posted 2001-05-18 10:32 AM


you really poured yourself into your words in this piece, this is beautiful writing.  i look forward to reading lots more from you, you are a talented writer.  keep posting all your work  

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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11 posted 2001-05-18 10:35 AM


::applauds::....Well well...excellent job here!! I got soooo into the poem...amazing job!!!
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12 posted 2001-05-18 12:45 PM


hey, i worte a poem with this same idea. i will put it on here soo for you guys to read. i really like the way you wrote this! good job.
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13 posted 2001-05-18 04:35 PM


Welcome to Passions! I enjoyed this poem highly. The message in the poem is so true you have no idea. Well done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Hidden
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14 posted 2001-05-24 09:41 AM


Thanks everyone!
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15 posted 2001-06-16 02:07 PM


Welcome, Hidden.  I know you're going to like it here.  I really enjoyed reading this piece.  It's going into my library... these are beautiful words, written with such emotion that it's impressive.  It's sad that you feel this way.  You seem so unhappy.  I guess in this case the true way to happiness is opening up and showing someone who you really are inside.  You'd be surprised at what might happen.  Very beautiful poem.  I can't wait to read more.

--Marie

"You're the girl of my nightmares, erotic and skull-faced.
Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection.  Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." -- Pul

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16 posted 2001-06-16 02:21 PM


i just felted like replying again...this poem has been read over and hit me more then first time...deep in my heart...a piece i loved ..bye

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

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