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my Brazilian friend |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world 
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(poems don't have to rhyme, do they???) You are my best friend- I know you so well. and when you are feeling down, you know I can tell. I tell you everything, my hopes, fears and deepest desires, you return the favor, telling me everything on your mind. You say you are going home soon, And I just can't stand the thought. your home is another country, will I ever see you again? I'm so confused, I don't know what to say... you know I'll miss you so much, and I know you don't want to leave. but I guess we must accept that-- that which we can not control. you came here seeking "The American Dream" what you found, was a home. you will always be welcome here, and deep in my heart I know-- we are best friends and will remain that way. Even though I will miss you so much. I will hold you in my heart, and never let go, for these memories we've made-- they're just so wonderful, I can barely describe. we met in the Chorus room, 2nd period at school. I will always love that room, and it will be cherrished for all time. I love you girl, and I hope you know, that no matter what you do... I'm always gonna be thinking about you, and I'll pray for you too. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
no poetry doesn't have to rhyme at all, in fact i enjoy free verse a great deal (so there allan). this is a really great story that you told with this, i like this piece a lot. keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Yes! This poem rocked...no no no poems do NOT have to rhyme. I liked this...I hope all works out well and you guys keep in touch.  ~Carly "I'll take in anyone who's taking off their camouflage..." ~Third Eye Blind~Camouflage |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
freeverse...is best when discribing feelings...i likd this poem...and you did quite well...thanks for the read...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I have advice for you. Save up your money and go see your brazillian chicky. Very nice work. It's been said already but I'm going to say it again, poems do not have to rhyme. I actually prefer free verse because you can say so much more. However, many would disagree. Just write whatever makes you happy. Good job. ~AF~ Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Im so sorry to hear that your friend is going back to her country. Its so hard to let go of people...But you two will always remain friends |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this poem....very out there...well done....and obviously poems don't have to ryhme....some people make a poem like this ********* ^^ &&& ** * * * * * * ()* *@#**@@@@ Make sense?....are they symbols? no, and yes. So yea hehe....do whatever you like. well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Hey sorry i didn't get to this one sooner... great work though Zu |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Stace: No, poems do NOT have to rhyme. The notion that they do is one that I dislike with a passion. The people that say that they do, I think, are often rather naive when it comes to just what poetry really is. Though, I often do tell people that they should try rhyming in their poems, but that is because rhyming is very good for boosting the "dictionary" in your brain. Anyhow, about this poem: I thought it was quite good. I think I know who you're talking about. I am glad that you and she established such a good friendship. It is VERY painful to lose friends like that. I know from experience. BTW, try not to put so many commas in your writing. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
god!! rythming!! help.....free verse is better.. |
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angel_2401 Member
since 2001-06-12
Posts 131Cincinnati, OH |
I like this one too Stace. I miss Cinthya soo much now that I've read it...  but I'm sure that she will come back. Love ya sis!, Kristin  |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
One last thing about wierd poems. Pin yer ears, Dopey, lol: I read one like this: The seven cherries . . . . . . . Sitting in a row How's that for a haiku lol "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey! kool poem, sad situation tho. i hope you guys stay friend and all. that would suck if poems did have to rhyme lol. i'd be in trouble! keep posting! -fear- |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
no poems don't have to rhyme you did really good Stace one of my favorites of yours very expressive, keep it up keep sharing hi Sweets, Kris, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Poems don't have to rhyme at all.  But symbols wouldn't work too well for a poem. Anyway, this was a nicely written poem. Very well done. Nice work! I enjoyed this quite a bit.--Marie "Imagine a pageant... |
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