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~*brittt*~
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since 2001-05-09
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East Haddam, CT

0 posted 2001-05-16 01:12 PM


You said you didn't love me,
Mt heart was torn in two
My whole world was then shattered
All because of you.

If this is how love goes
Then I don't need it anymore.
If it always has to end,
Then what's it really for?

I thought I was in love,
But you finally proved me wrong
Everything that we once shared,
Is now forever gone.

But one thing that's for sure,
With every word I speak
I'll love you more and more-
That's a promise I will keep...

If you live to be 100 years old, I want to live to be 101 so I never have to live a day without you.

© Copyright 2001 Brittney - All Rights Reserved
Godsend_1
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since 2001-04-19
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great state of illinois
1 posted 2001-05-16 01:22 PM


wow i really liked this britt you seem to have a lot of emotion that you put into your work and that is really good i enjoyed this i hope to read more stuff soon   love ya

ben

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it

to make the world the greatest place is the perfect dre

keoni
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since 2000-10-16
Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC
2 posted 2001-05-16 01:38 PM


I really liked this one. Although, I have not had great luck with love lately( which is why I don't love poems anymore), I still enjoyed this alot. It has great flow. Good job.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

~*brittt*~
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since 2001-05-09
Posts 76
East Haddam, CT
3 posted 2001-05-16 01:44 PM


Hey. I just posted this and I already have 2 replies. Thanx guys. Jon: sorry youre not having any luck. I'm obviously not either. Did anyone else notice all the poems I write are about guys and breakups and stuff like that? Oh well... I've come to the conclusion they all suck so I've given up! Hehe... j/k. thanx again guys!
~britt~

If you live to be 100 years old, I want to live to be 101 so I never have to live a day without you.

anonymous albert ?
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4 posted 2001-05-17 02:23 AM


hey...i liked this a lot britt...you wrote it very nicely through your feelings...great job and hope to see more... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Dopey Dope
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5 posted 2001-05-17 02:59 AM


2 things....
Love isn't causing the pain....what's causing the pain is the lack of love....better known as unrequited love.

and the second thing is....why are you promising that you'll love the person more and more? What's the use?
Get over him and move on....regardless of how long it'll take...let go....it's healthier....good luck!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies
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6 posted 2001-05-18 05:53 PM


There goes Dopes --- don't start with Mr. Romantic  
but what he says is true though
It's sad, but I have to agree with him on this one
hope this do work out for you
thanks for sharing
~*hugs*~
be strong

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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