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xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

0 posted 2001-05-15 11:04 PM

If you take my hand,
Promise never to let go?
~
If you look in my eyes,
Promise to let your love show?

If you stroke my hair,
Does that mean you'll always be there?
~
If you kiss my lips,
Does that mean no one elses love can compare?

If you send a smile my way,
Are you trying to say you'll be there for me?
~
If your im my dreams night and day,
Are you trying to say you'll always be with me?

If you make me cry,
Was it really that you dont care?
~
If you wipe my tears away,
I guess you always will be there...

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-16 12:05 PM

suched beautiful words that has lead me to imagine such beautiful things...great job i really enjoyed the way you've wrote this poem...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

DancinQueen

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since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

2 posted 2001-05-16 12:25 PM

hey michi

great one here...keep it up

*dq

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

3 posted 2001-05-16 09:36 AM

beautiful writing! i like this piece a lot, i really like the format and the way you wrote this. the ending was also great, keep posting your poetry

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-17 02:38 AM

I enjoyed the poem. The unraveling of the poem is good cuz you think the guy won't be there, but apparently he is....he helped you out even though he might have caused you pain. I liked this one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Heavens Tears

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since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

5 posted 2001-05-18 12:03 PM

Aww. This one was beautiful. And it was so sweet. Keep it up.

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow. I feel kinda sorry for it...

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-05-20 12:11 PM

what wonderful words. This is really beautiful. keep it up and keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

joycerogers
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since 2001-05-16

Posts 83
Texas

7 posted 2001-05-20 11:14 AM

More gals should have poems like this to read to their boyfriends who promise them the world.

To read poems posted here
at Passions In Poetry, by Joyce Click Here

Quiet Thunder, rumble
Through my cloud.
Touch my secret parts
Where only you are allowed. - Joyce Rogers

[This message has been edited by joycerogers (edited 05-20-2001).]

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

8 posted 2001-05-21 07:47 AM

Pretty. Very pretty. I think that it's great to have a companion like this. Good luck!
Keep 'em coming.

Jenn

"If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari

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