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XFalloutX
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0 posted 2001-05-15 08:57 PM


Im writting this of the top of my head.

Dreams are what makes us US
We dream at night we dream during the day
Our mind wonders of how things could be
How we wish they could've been
Without dreams what is there to live for
To look forward to
So never let go of those dreams
Hold on to them
Dreams are what makes us US

"should I smile because we are friends or cry because thats all will ever be?"

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lonely*soul
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1 posted 2001-05-15 09:12 PM


dreams are always awsome man...good job on this one  
         *KiMMiE*

chasing rain
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2 posted 2001-05-15 09:36 PM


Pat, you did it again...you and your head..what will you come up with next?   Good job, man. And SEW yourself. :P
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3 posted 2001-05-16 01:30 AM


i liked this...a enjoyable read...and the message is a nice one...thanks for sharing... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

banburycross
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4 posted 2001-05-16 09:38 AM


i like this thought, poems off the top of your head are good, the let the reader take a peek at your thought processes    good job and keep posting.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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5 posted 2001-05-16 02:54 PM


A good read an interesting message... well done.
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6 posted 2001-05-17 03:00 PM


True....very well done. It had wonderful thoughts.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Rach813
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7 posted 2001-05-17 04:14 PM


This is a ver good poem....keep up the good work
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8 posted 2001-05-17 11:15 PM


Interesting, I'm wondering if you intended to give the "dream" an adhesive quality as something that makes us "US."  
Is this to say that dreams make us who we are individually, or they make us more of a group to relate to one another, as a collective "us?"  This confused me.
Thanks for confusing me.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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