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chas
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0 posted 2001-05-14 10:53 PM




If I could see, Would you be there in front of me?
If I could hear, What would you say?
If I were to fall, Would you let me be?
Or would you check to see if I'm okay?

If I was crying, Would you ask me why?
Would you wipe my tears away and tell me not to cry?
If I don't want to breathe, What would you do?
Do you love me enough to make me continue to?

Would you believe me if I said,
That I can't get you out of my head?
Would you believe me if I say,
That I would love you everyday?

I'll be waiting from now till then,
Until you finish answering all my questions.
And when you do you won't be through,
Cus I'll continue to ask you them again.
Because my love for you will never end.

© Copyright 2001 chas - All Rights Reserved
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In a dream
1 posted 2001-05-14 11:00 PM


Awesome poem chas, the whole poem was great but the ending was the icing on the cake! Keep on writing.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."  
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2 posted 2001-05-14 11:04 PM


that a boy, i loved ti chas, great job kid.
keep writing for me   CHOCOLATE..YUM!!

$ Jeff $   :  )

"If I'm not back in 5 minutes......just wait longer!"

"You may take our lives, but you'll never take our FREEDOM!

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3 posted 2001-05-14 11:27 PM


great poem...i really enjoyed this whole read...thanks for sharing... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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4 posted 2001-05-15 07:41 PM


Great poem...i hope you get your questions answered!!
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5 posted 2001-05-16 03:35 AM


Well done on this one. Hope all runs smoothly in the future.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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6 posted 2001-05-30 07:04 PM


Beautiful write.  Just don't bother yourself too much with all those questions, it'll only drive you crazy.  keep sharing

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

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In a dream world
7 posted 2001-05-31 11:35 AM


I love this poem. it flows really well, and it's a great poem.

Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

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8 posted 2001-06-01 11:39 AM


Mmm.... chocolate.  
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