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thedarkangel
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~*~the cutest~*~

0 posted 2001-05-14 01:07 PM


As Darkness surounds me
I long for his embrace
He softly speaks my name
Causing my heart to pound
and race...

His tender touch
his soft embrace
as his
apple lips brush my
waiting face.

My eyes snap open
and wait for his sweet taste
but realise he's my dream
and he's gone.
he left, left without a trace.

~*~long distance relationships suck huh? At least it's only an hour and a half apart!!! plus how do u get those little sayings at the end of the poem?~*~

© Copyright 2001 laura - All Rights Reserved
banburycross
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viginia
1 posted 2001-05-14 01:51 PM


this is sad, i wake up lots of mornings like this... this is well written, you did a great job expressing yourself.  keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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2 posted 2001-05-14 02:35 PM


interesting poem..sad and the way you discribed yourf eelings was quite beautiful..thanks for the read.... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Tangerines
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since 2001-05-07
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Richmond, Virginia
3 posted 2001-05-14 02:48 PM


I like this a lot. Your rhyme scheme is interesting: unexpected, almost. Lots of emotion. Nice.  

"I don't judge people, I just watch them till it's time to look away. I wanna look away now." - Kristin Hersh

vixengrl04
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4 posted 2001-05-14 04:04 PM


Awww this was really cute and I like the way you wrote it.  To get those "little saying things" at the bottom of your posts, scroll up to the very top of the site and you will see a box that says "Member's Area/Help".  Click there and under the first section "Utilities and Tools" you'll find where it says "Change Your Profile".  Click there, enter your username and password, and then go down until you find "Signature" and then you just type in your lil quote or whatever you wanna put in there.  When you're posting, click the box below that says "show signature" to show it.  Sounds confusing, but you'll follow it easily!  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

Ina
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5 posted 2001-05-14 04:15 PM


This was great....i know the long distance thing...your luckier...mine is like 1000 miles away...
great work!

Regina

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

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6 posted 2001-05-15 01:32 AM


Well vixen already informed on how to get the quotes....anyhow the poem was great. Long distant relationships can be difficult, but they do work if you have the right amount of  devotion and maturity. Good luck!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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7 posted 2001-05-15 07:38 PM


This was so sad!!!! Long distance relationships DEFINATELY SUCK!!!! But great job expressing how much they do!! LoL
Suga_Baby
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8 posted 2001-05-15 09:56 PM


This is so sad   but well done!

,
Suga

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

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9 posted 2001-05-22 01:38 PM


Don't you just hate that?  He'll come your way. Patience is a virtue.  thanks for the read and keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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