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silvrduck
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0 posted 2001-05-13 11:30 PM


Well I wish I had a better poem to celebrate my 100th post(yay!) lol, but oh well.. I guess this will just have to do  
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tastes so salty
in ways I see undone
threw you a reason for
somehow you’re missing some
quick to understand?
touched, undisturbed
given unseasoned, sensually superb

will you dare to throw it away?
wouldn’t you care for what they don’t say?

too many ways
blinded in false hands
in so many views there
still are too many demands
of this, amorous pursuit
so unworth the waste
soiled again, of bitter tastes

can you trust to take this dive?
what if you must, to keep this trance alive?

quick to displace
forget the steps i’ve taken..
quick to hold back
instead, you’ll leave me forsaken..


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anonymous albert ?
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1 posted 2001-05-14 12:37 PM


quick to displace
forget the steps i’ve taken..
quick to hold back
instead, you’ll leave me forsaken..
i liekd this verse in this poem..good job and congrats on 100!!! ...keep writing and replying... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

banburycross
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viginia
2 posted 2001-05-14 10:22 AM


greatimages in this, i like this poem a lot.  oh yeah, and congrats on your 100th, just 400 more and you can join us here senior members    great job on this, keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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3 posted 2001-05-14 10:28 AM


Congrats on your 100th post... Great poem I enjoyed the read, thanx for sharing.  
Mr mr Zu

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4 posted 2001-05-14 01:53 PM


  Hmm..I had to read this a few times. Nice thoughts, made me go deeper than the surface. Congrats.  
  ~Carly

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Tangerines
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5 posted 2001-05-14 02:38 PM


I love this line: "forget the steps i’ve taken." Very nice poem.  

"I don't judge people, I just watch them till it's time to look away. I wanna look away now." - Kristin Hersh

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6 posted 2001-05-16 02:39 PM


So hey this was a good poem. I enjoyed it very much!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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7 posted 2001-05-21 08:55 PM


~*applauds*~ This is really good.  Excellent!!!  Excellent!!!

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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