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broken wing
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0 posted 2001-05-13 11:22 PM


unspoken words
but i know the look
that look u give me

the way you look at me
the way you touch me
the way you smile at me

i know them all
enprinted on to my brain
each and everything you do

a loving look
a sweet caress
a gentle smile

you know everything
every swell, every curve,
every expression

just like i know everything
everything
about you

"To me, fair friend, u never can be old,
For as u were when first ur eye I eyed,
Such seems ur beauty still." ~W.S.

© Copyright 2001 broken wing - All Rights Reserved
anonymous albert ?
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1 posted 2001-05-14 12:38 PM


i liked this poemn...nice job and keep writing...broken... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

banburycross
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viginia
2 posted 2001-05-14 10:24 AM


i like the feeling and the tone of this a lot, this is a really nice piece.  keep postingall your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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Lurking
3 posted 2001-05-14 10:26 AM


Great poem I really enjoyed the read.  

Mr mr Zu

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vixengrl04
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4 posted 2001-05-14 11:19 AM


I found this one to be really really sweet and I liked it alot.  Great job.  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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5 posted 2001-05-18 04:08 PM


Well done here. I really liked this one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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Twilight Zone
6 posted 2001-05-20 10:26 PM


I lke it a lot.  very expressive poem.  keep it up

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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