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luckyducky_505 Member
since 2001-04-29
Posts 53Kentucky, USA |
Okay.... this is coming off the top of my head b/c I need to get some stuff off my shoulders. Here it goes!~~ As I sit here and wonder why you haven't called I sit here and think it is because of my embarrassing fall. I know I'm clumsy, But if you like me as you say you do, You'll call and ask me the one thing I wanna hear from you. I wrote this on 5-13-01 at 7:14 PM (the time I posted it) TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK!!! [This message has been edited by luckyducky_505 (edited 05-13-2001).] |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
oops...okay...see the second one...cuz I accidently posted it again...but you see, it told me it messed up...but apparantly it didnt...yea... [This message has been edited by stace_co2003 (edited 05-13-2001).] |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
wow!! you can do poems right off the top of your head? I can't do that!! lol. it's really good. and it's interesting...who are you waiting to call you?  *s* Stace |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
the waiting is the hardest part, the waiting and willing the phone to ring. well i hope he calls and everything works out for you.  Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked it and poems right top of the head some times turns out good...thansk for sharing and i hope things turn out best for you...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
i feel the same way! lol i sat by the phone all weekend waiting for my so-called "boyfriend" to call. he never did :-( oh well at least ur poem is kool! lol c ya -fear- |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Well done on the post it's great considering you just sat down and wrote it. Hope to se more soon. Mr Mr Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I write right off the top of my head sometimes 2. This was cute, I hope that he calls. I HATE waiting 4 somebody 2 call who never does. It's even worse when they say they are going 2 and don't. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Aren't all poems written from the top of your head? I mean, can we write them from the sides or the bottom or something? I mean where do the poems actually come from? I mean if they come from the top then yea...i write them from the top too...i guess....and....ignore me.... yea well done on the poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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luckyducky_505 Member
since 2001-04-29
Posts 53Kentucky, USA |
Thanks everybody for the replies!!! He finally called me yesterday and guess what he asked me to be his girlfriend. So everything worked out as good as gold!! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
For such a short poem, you've shown your feelings really well. Hope things work out. keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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