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Terryloveiris_85
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 61
The middle of nowhere

0 posted 2001-05-11 08:00 PM

Why must I hide,
my true feelings toward you?

Why must I look for other love,
when of you, there are so few?

Why should I give all my love,
when all you want to do is throw it away?

Why must I waste on you my feelings,
when "no" is all you have to say?

But insted all you do,
is hurt them even more.

I can't help what I feel,
and all my love, you it's for.

i'd give eternity to be by your side-goo goo dolls/City of Angels soundtrack

I don't know the key to success, but the key to failure is trying to p

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-11 09:56 PM

i liked throughtout the poem..it is a sad situation and you wrote it quite well...and i think the alst part of the last verse kinda sounded iffy..maybe consider changing,otehr then that..you did a good job..keep wriitng...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Ski*Chick
Member

since 2001-01-13

Posts 141
Fitchburg, Mass, Usa

2 posted 2001-05-11 10:01 PM

I loved your poem keep it up

Min

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

3 posted 2001-05-14 04:35 PM

Appreciate the read and keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

4 posted 2001-05-14 04:42 PM

Great read, good work I really enjoyed it... keep sharing

Mr mr Zu.

" The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson

E-mail/Msn: Targetmrzu@hotmail.com

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

5 posted 2001-05-14 06:10 PM

Cute, cute. I hope this person returns the love you have for them.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-05-15 03:42 AM

I hope all goes well with you in the future with the person yer talkin about in the poem. As for the poem itself....it was ok. I've read better from you, but nonetheless good.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-05-15 09:15 PM

What s sux so much about love is you cant tell you heart who to love...no matter what you do if you were meant to fall in love with that person..your inevitably going too...hang in there hunny...

lonely*soul
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since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

8 posted 2001-05-15 09:17 PM

luv hurts..but this was a really good one i liked it! short and sweet
*KiMMiE*

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