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Face in the Mirror
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Face in the Mirror |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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I'm tired of the way I'm treated, I'm tired of living in fear. I'm tired of the way I'm taunted, by that face in the mirror. The one you supposedly fell in love with, the face that belongs to me, the one that you know without a doubt, will beautiful never be. I'm tired of feeling the way I do, like I'm not good enough to hear, the words you whisper late at night, because of that face inside the mirror. The one my parents seem to hate, my dad gave me away, the one I see constantly, that haunts me every day. I'm tired of everyone assuming, that i like you beacuse of fear, they make fun of you beccause you're short, but what haunts me is that mirror. I wrote this about a friend of mine, so don't get conscerned. I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
read I would. It's on page 2. I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wow really strong emotions came through on this one it helped you explained in the foot note that it wasn't about you and it was about a friend because the emotions are so strong.  Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Hey Zu, I added something on The People At Passions Part 2 for you. Check it out! Anyways, thanks! I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hmm... very nice. I hope your friend reads this, and all turns up peachy for him/her. ~Allan |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Im glad this is about a friend, not you, but talk to her. *~*Amanda*~* |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this was a strong emotion you discribed even tho...this wasnt from your situation..i thought you did well..and hope your friend feels better about things...keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
I'm glad that you aren't going thru this...cuz it is awful, it is awful to think no one cares about you, it is awful to hate yourself...especially cuz of the way you look. I speak from experience lol. Keep up the awesome work, and keep writing!! Lotsa Love, ~*~SweetStuff~*~ SuMdAy U'll CrY 4 mE bUt I wOn'T cRy 4 U, sUmDaY U'll MiSs Me LiKe I MiSsD U, SuMdAy Ull nEeD mE LiKe I nEeDed U, sUmDaY U'll lUv Me BuT I wOn'T LuV U |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hey sweetstuff replied, she hasn't been around in a while First of all, thanks for telling us the dilly hope your friend would stop her self pity and start to feel better about herself. You as a friend could help her with that Allysa. "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
you had me worried while i was reading this, i hope everything turns out ok with your friend. powerful emotion in this piece, i enjoyed this poem a lot Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
thanks everyone, she's alright. This is actually from a while ago, and she's since then gotten help for everything that's wrong. Banbury, I'm in the process of writing you an e mail. I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This reminds me a lot of one of my friends...but it is a very good poem!! Im glad to hear it is not you who thinks this way of yourself |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this one.....I don't know....i didn't feel the line about him being short fit within the poem. I liked it though....the poem i mean.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Dana Samples Member
since 2001-04-07
Posts 68 |
hey it tought this was really great. we all know what its like to be taunted by the face in the mirror. i love the emotions in this poem. keep it up. love, dana |
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