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Tamma
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0 posted 2001-05-11 03:53 PM


As I lay me down to sleep,
My heart stutters –
          And skips a beat.
I pray for our souls to keep,
But we’re losing –
          Them to the heat.

When nights grow cold,
Hearts as one –
          We’ll be together.
Each other’s arms we’ll hold,
On our bodies –
          Sweat will glitter.

Those girls on TV don't know that being
36-24-36 doesn't mean a thing unless
you got the face to back it up

© Copyright 2001 Tamma M. Wilson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-11 03:56 PM


Tamma,  I think that out of all of your posts, I like this one best.  It's really well written and I enjoyed reading it and I'm glad I get to be the first reply. Anyhow, if you want to talk about ANYTHING, I'm here.  PPL at my school somehow wind up telling me EVERYTHING anyways, so I found I'm a pretty good listener.

I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish)

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2 posted 2001-05-11 08:22 PM


Ooh, this is definitely my favorite of yours so far. ^^  hehehe  Of course, I haven't read much of your work compared to the older members of this forum... x_X  But!  Nevertheless, I think this one has some of the softest imagery out of all of the poems that I've read of yours thus far. ^^  Very pretty, and lovely work... really really soft and warm...

Now, for some reason, I'm getting the image of velvet and satin... okay, something tells me that my imagination is getting carried away with me again... ^^;  Ah, well... hehehe  I enjoyed the poem!  And I just thought that since this was my favorite of yours so far, I thought that I'd say so. ^^v  You're a wonderful poet, and love to see more of your work!  Enjoy life, write lots, and have a nice day!


- holatuwol

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3 posted 2001-05-11 11:24 PM


you've written this so...well...i think this a very nice poem...thanks for sharing and keep writing... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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4 posted 2001-05-12 01:51 AM


Oooh Tamma this is wonderful! I really love this. You have chosen a creative way to write it. I have no qualms with this piece.

You're in the library for sure.  

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

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5 posted 2001-05-12 03:05 AM


this is nice....
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6 posted 2001-05-12 11:39 AM


o o o how purdyful was that *sniff* lols
very nice!!!!!!! muchs enjoyed lols
tiff

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7 posted 2001-05-14 06:09 PM


Tamma, OMG!!! Your poetry has grown so much.  I'm very impressed with this one.  Keep it up girl  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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8 posted 2001-05-18 02:57 PM


Tamma this one is absolutely one of my favs from you.
You have grown so much.
well done!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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