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Tamma
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0 posted 2001-05-11 06:45 AM



Can’t you see
I’m hurting inside?
All because of you . . .
Can’t you see
I loved you so?
But that’s over now . . .
Can’t you see
I’m happy with him?
I’ve moved on from you . . .
Can’t you see
The love in my eyes?
Its all for him . . .
Can’t you see
He’s good to me?

Those girls on TV don't know that being
36-24-36 doesn't mean a thing unless
you got the face to back it up

© Copyright 2001 Tamma M. Wilson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-11 08:08 AM


Girl, I have a feeling this is another one of those relating to life's love problems type of poems.  What's up?  So, u're with Will, right?  Is Justin trying to get back w/ you? What's going on?? Good expression tho. Byes>   Hugs~

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to.  I never thought that I couldn't.
Life's tough, get a helmet.

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viginia
2 posted 2001-05-11 10:36 AM


i really like the last two lines of this, the rhyming at the end was a really cool effect.  you did a wonderful job on this, thank you for the read  

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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3 posted 2001-05-11 04:04 PM


adding to library,  

I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish)

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4 posted 2001-05-16 01:58 AM


Well done on this....as long as yer happy tamma  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-05-20 10:39 PM


Don't let this other person even bother you if you're happy with who you're with already.  beautiful write Tamma

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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6 posted 2001-05-20 11:18 PM


great poem tamma...this is very emotional...which i enjoyed this  alot...thanks for sharing it... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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