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Celebi
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0 posted 2001-05-10 08:50 PM



When he walks down the hall,
I turn red

When I see him on the street,
I sigh and say " hes so cute"

But when I talk to him on aol,
I laugh,
And he is my friend

                       ~Celebi~

© Copyright 2001 Celebi - All Rights Reserved
lonely*soul
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1 posted 2001-05-10 09:41 PM


not that good as a poem..but its the truth you totally are diff from who you are in rreal life hehe    i can talk my heart away on the puter  
     *KiMMiE*

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2 posted 2001-05-10 09:52 PM


Ahhh i know what its like...good luck girl
banburycross
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viginia
3 posted 2001-05-11 09:34 AM


People are usually a lot less shy online and on the computer, i hope you can talk to him in person and i hope everything works out for you.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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4 posted 2001-05-11 09:40 AM


Does he know at all?
Maybe you should tell him  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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5 posted 2001-05-11 09:41 AM


I think the concept behind the poem is excellent and with a little work you could improve having said that what do i know? Anyway i totally agree talking online is so much easier in real life although it cannot replace real life and there is something  about not being able to look into the persons eyes when you are talking to them that make the web a poor susbtitute. Anyway nuff said  
Zu

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with you
6 posted 2001-05-11 09:49 AM


This is so cute....I liked this....and yea, you should tell him  
knightlyshadows
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7 posted 2001-05-11 11:27 AM


awwww this was sweet. you should tell him hun. *hugs* good luck with this.
tiff

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U in the dark u in the pain u on the run
Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell

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8 posted 2001-05-11 05:25 PM


I'll agree talking online is a lot easier than in person... offline I'm very introverted, but as you all know online I talk to everyone all the time.  
It's strange how we can change like this so easily, isn't it?
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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9 posted 2001-05-16 02:41 AM


Pretty simple in style....I thought it was ok.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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