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knightlyshadows
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since 2001-04-14
Posts 791
obscured vision

0 posted 2001-05-10 07:29 PM


before hand....i just want you to know that this is not directed towards anybody.......you know who you are.

THIS GAME

you say ive changed
im not the same person...
you once knew
but have i really?
did you ever know me?

you say ive changed
im not happy...
like i used to be
but have i really?
when was i ever happy?

i play this game well
game of deceit...
me and my mask
we fooled you
fooled you all

i play this game well
so well...
i fooled myself

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

U in the dark u in the pain u on the run
Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell

© Copyright 2001 Tiffany Durham - All Rights Reserved
mistic
Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.
1 posted 2001-05-10 07:41 PM


I really like this one. It's something I can relate to. I like the bit of repeatition that you did.   Keep writing.
MoeRocko
Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 166
West Virginia
2 posted 2001-05-10 08:26 PM


That is so me. Sometimes I wonder.....

Castles made of sand slip into Sea eventually...

Why do people remind me of vacuums?

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2001-05-10 08:39 PM


I liked it, good job on the poem.  When I read the beginning I tried to guess what it was about, but I ended up being off a little.  You got me    nice job.

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

[This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 05-10-2001).]

Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
4 posted 2001-05-13 12:01 PM


You should stop playing games and just show your true self    You seem to be really nice, though you won't talk in yahoo chat at all  

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
5 posted 2001-05-18 01:48 PM


I enjoyed the poem. Thought you wrote it just fine. Although it's not your best I still thought it had some good thoughts within it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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