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~DreamChild~
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in your dreams

0 posted 2001-05-10 03:35 PM


a broken heart beats wildly
within my aching chest
it's wings tread violently against the winds
of my soul which cannot rest

flood rains pour inside my mind
beating like a drum
emotions mingle with the drops
as constant as a hum

my head hangs low in mourning
for the wine I cannot sip
hallucinations come to life
when I still taste you on my lips

I think about your every curve
a place to rest a kiss
where I can lie my head to dream
as I sleep in heavenly bliss

so slowly I close my eyes  
in an attempt to change the pace
only to make my blood rush faster
as I visualize your face

into your eyes i have fallen
deep into the blue
yet, in my eyes you've taken flight
and to my head you flew

i want to run my fingers down your cheek
and over your chin
lift your face into my view
to kiss you once again

take you softly into my arms
and whisper in your ear
cry no more my sweet princess
your valiant prince is here

now I must awaken
from a dream I;ll never leave
Though my eyes may seem to open
in my heart I'm still asleep

still clinging on to fantasies
of your gentle gorgeous smile
embracing you so tenderly
Forever In A While

Freedom is the dream of sleeping reality
                ~DreamChild~

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1 posted 2001-05-10 03:48 PM


this is really wonderful  
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2 posted 2001-05-10 03:58 PM


way awesome.  THis is the first I believe I have read of yours and it's awesome. Can't wait to read more.  

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to.  I never thought that I couldn't.
Life's tough, get a helmet.

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3 posted 2001-05-10 05:46 PM


Simply excellent!!!!
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4 posted 2001-05-12 06:02 PM


this is excellent, a little too long, but excellent

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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5 posted 2001-05-12 07:00 PM


awesome poem..you have written it really nicely...i enjoyed this quite a bit...thanks for the read...and keep writing... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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6 posted 2001-05-12 07:03 PM


WOW!!!  I really loved this one, and it touched me...keep up the great work, and i hope to see more like this one.  Good Job!  

kristin

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7 posted 2001-05-12 09:22 PM


This is ABSOLUTELY WONDERFUL!!!!!   i love the detail you go into about holding her in your arms, etc. It's brilliant. I love it! mos def goin in my library    


Valerie

Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you

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8 posted 2001-05-16 07:16 PM


Nicely done....don't mind acire...he's a wuss for long poems haha....
I enjoyed it....it was long, and I am a wuss too  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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